Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The charts illustrate the annual percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much consumed in the USA.
Overall, sodium was mostly consumed by dinner and its percentage was much lower in snacks and breakfast, and while the saturated fat was also mostly used by dinner and it was used by breakfast on extremely lower scale. Furthermore, the added sugar was consumed by snacks more than breakfast, lunch and dinner.
In detail, the proportion of sodium in snacks was only 14%. Nevertheless, the consumption of saturated fat in snacks was 21% and 42% in added sugar. Furthermore, sodium was extremely used by dinner at the rate of 43% while saturated fat was consumed 37% and 23% added sugar by dinner. Additionally, the percentage of sodium in breakfast was 14% and 29% for lunch. Moreover, saturated fat consumed by breakfast was only 16% and 26% by lunch and the percentage of added sugar for breakfast was also 16% and it was 19% for lunch.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main features of the three nutrients across the four meal types. You successfully highlighted the key trends, such as sodium being highest at dinner and added sugar peaking in snacks. However, the report is somewhat mechanical; it lists data points rather than synthesising them into a more analytical summary. To reach a higher band, focus on grouping the data more effectively to highlight significant comparisons (e.g., contrasting the high sugar content in snacks with the low sodium content) rather than listing percentages for each meal sequentially.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into an introduction, an overview, and a detail paragraph, which provides a logical structure. You use cohesive devices like 'Furthermore', 'Nevertheless', and 'Additionally' to link ideas. However, some of these transitions feel slightly repetitive or forced. The progression of ideas within the detail paragraph is a bit disjointed because you jump between nutrients and meal types frequently. Improving the flow by grouping information by nutrient or by comparing meal types more fluidly would enhance the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to convey the necessary information. You use terms like 'proportion', 'consumption', and 'nutrients' correctly. However, there is a lack of variety in your verb choices; you rely heavily on 'consumed' and 'used'. Phrases like 'extremely lower scale' and 'extremely used' are unnatural and imprecise. To improve, try to incorporate more varied reporting verbs and adjectives to describe the data, such as 'accounted for', 'predominated', or 'a significant proportion'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors, such as 'sodium was mostly consumed by dinner' (should be 'at dinner') and 'saturated fat consumed by breakfast was only 16%' (missing 'the' or a verb). There are also issues with preposition usage and awkward phrasing, such as 'on extremely lower scale'. These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit the accuracy of your writing. Focus on subject-verb agreement and more natural prepositional phrases.
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