Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Well according to the situation there are three types of nutrients which every individual use in their daily life. The main three important nutrients which are sodium saturated fat and sugar these three are essential for body . But the ecssive consumption that could be harm for human body .

Disadvantage

Use of sugar in regular can cause the diabetes

Excessive use of sodium can cause blood pressure problems

Solution

Going outside for a walk ,do exercise, less use of sugar ,just eat Fibers because Fibers have water and little amount of sugar which can be enough for Human body.

Some people consume sodium in Excessive amounts they need to take sodium in a balance quantity.

In many areas like in USA people need to give them awareness through the ads posters about the disadvantage of the deit so that the could use a healthy food in there daily life

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 3.0

The response fails to address the core requirements of an Academic Task 1 report. Instead of summarizing the data provided in the charts (the percentages of sodium, saturated fats, and added sugars in meals), the student provides a general essay about the health risks of these nutrients and offers personal advice on diet and exercise. The task requires a factual description of the visual information, including comparisons and trends. Because the student did not report on the data at all, the response is largely off-topic and does not fulfill the purpose of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response is not organized as a report. It uses headings like 'Disadvantage' and 'Solution', which are inappropriate for a data summary task. The progression of ideas is disjointed, moving from a general introduction to a list of health problems and then to recommendations. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences or ideas logically. The paragraphing is fragmented, with several one-sentence paragraphs that do not contribute to a coherent structure. The overall arrangement is more akin to a set of notes than a formal piece of writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. The student uses basic terms such as 'nutrients', 'body', 'sugar', and 'sodium' throughout the text. There are several instances of awkward phrasing and incorrect word choices, such as 'ecssive consumption that could be harm' (should be 'excessive consumption that could be harmful') and 'give them awareness' (should be 'raise awareness'). The range of vocabulary is insufficient to discuss data or trends effectively, and the spelling errors (e.g., 'ecssive', 'deit') further detract from the quality of the writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with frequent errors. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement, article usage, and sentence structure. For example, 'every individual use' should be 'every individual uses', and 'the could use a healthy food' is grammatically incorrect. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing commas and incorrect capitalization. The lack of complex sentence structures makes the writing feel repetitive and basic. These errors are frequent and occasionally impede the reader's understanding of the intended meaning.

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