Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-08
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The information about average percentage in typical meals of three types of nutrients all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much has been illustrated by the assigned pie chart.
Overall,it is clearly seen from the mention pie chart. The maximum percentage was in dinner, while the minimum in breakfast.
As can be observed,the percentage of typical meal of nutrients was in sodium by snacks and breakfast was similar. Moreover, the percentage of typical meals of nutrients in dinner was 43% whereas 29% in lunch.
Additionally, the proportion of typical meals of nutrients by saturated fat in snacks was 21%,as compared to breakfast was 16%. Movingahead,the proportion of typical meals of nutrients in dinner was 37% from
farmer and 26% in lunch was from latter.
Furthermore,A minor dispensary could be noticed in the snacks and breakfast to be precise; by the entire data ranging from 47% and 16%, Respectably.the percentage of typical meals of nutrients in dinner was higher rather than lunch was 23% and 19%
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize the data but fails to clearly distinguish between the three different nutrients (sodium, saturated fats, and added sugars). The description is confusing, as it often refers to 'nutrients' in a general sense rather than specifying which nutrient corresponds to which percentage. While some data points are mentioned, the lack of clarity regarding the categories makes it difficult for the reader to follow the trends. The overview is also vague and does not effectively highlight the main features or significant differences between the meal types. To improve, you must clearly label the data for each nutrient and ensure the comparisons are accurate and easy to follow.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into short paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'Additionally', and 'Furthermore' is mechanical and often does not connect ideas logically. For example, the transition 'Movingahead' is misspelled and poorly integrated. Referencing is also unclear; it is often difficult to determine what the percentages refer to due to awkward sentence structures. The paragraphing is present but does not effectively group related information, leading to a disjointed reading experience. Improving the flow between sentences and ensuring clear referencing is essential for a higher score.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with frequent misuse of terms. Phrases like 'minor dispensary' (likely meant 'discrepancy') and 'Respectably' (likely meant 'respectively') indicate a lack of precision and control over word choice. The phrasing 'from farmer' and 'from latter' is confusing and does not accurately describe the data. There is little evidence of a range of vocabulary suitable for describing charts or trends. To improve, focus on learning specific collocations for data description, such as 'account for', 'represent', 'a significant proportion', and 'the majority of'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are issues with sentence structure, such as 'The maximum percentage was in dinner, while the minimum in breakfast', which lacks a verb in the second clause. Punctuation is inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and periods (e.g., 'Overall,it', 'observed,the'). Subject-verb agreement and preposition usage are also problematic throughout the text. While there is an attempt at complex structures, they are often faulty and unclear. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for punctuation errors would significantly improve the clarity of your writing.
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