Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-08
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The pie chart illustrate the average proportion of three nutrients sodium saturated fat and added suger that may be when consumed the excessive amounts the show data these nutrients and snacks overall, dinner contains the highest proportion of both sodium and saturated fat whereas snacks account for the largest share of added sugar by contrast breakfast the smallest proportion of all three nutrients paragraph ;first at sodium dinner accounts for all the larger proportion 43% followed by lunch 29% in the comparison breack
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, reaching only 83 words. Consequently, the task is not fully addressed. While the student attempts to identify the main features, such as dinner having the highest sodium and snacks having the highest sugar, the report is incomplete. The description of the data is fragmented and stops abruptly mid-sentence. Because the response is significantly under-length and lacks a complete summary or conclusion, it does not provide a sufficient overview of the information presented in the charts.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text lacks a logical structure. While there is an attempt at an introduction and an overview, the body paragraph is incomplete and ends mid-sentence. Cohesive devices are largely absent, and the transition between ideas is disjointed. The lack of proper paragraphing and the abrupt termination of the text significantly hinder the flow of information, making it difficult for the reader to follow the intended comparison of the data.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary is limited and contains several spelling errors, such as 'suger' instead of 'sugar' and 'breack' instead of 'breakfast'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe the data accurately. There is a lack of variety in reporting verbs and comparative language, which is essential for an Academic Task 1 response. The repetition of basic terms and the inability to use precise terminology to describe the charts further limit the score in this criterion.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including missing articles, incorrect verb forms ('The pie chart illustrate'), and punctuation issues. Sentence structures are simple and often incomplete, which prevents the demonstration of a range of complex structures. The lack of control over basic grammar, combined with the unfinished nature of the sentences, makes the text difficult to read and understand. Significant improvement in sentence construction and proofreading is required to achieve a higher band score.
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