Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA
Student answer (Band 4.5)
the three picharts demonstrate the consumpution of three nutrients in the usa in the the form of sodium,saturated fatand added suger. the diffrent ration of these elements has been used in the multiple meals. these elemnts considers as the nutrious elements of the any meal if taken in the specific quantities however excessive use deteririorating the health.
soudium consuption in the dinner the covering the 43%,lunch lies after it which is appoximately 29%while the percentage od sodium in breakfast and snacks lies in the same percentage which is 14%.
saturated fat in the dinner is covering the large propotion around 37%, breakfast is laying at the lowest point which is only 16%, lunch has the 26 percent of the fat however in snacks 21% are present.
added sugar snacks are covering 42%of the which is almost the huge area of the chart while breakfast is only 16%. dinner the added sugar will be at 19% and dinner has 23% of the addational gulocose.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the prompt by reporting information on the consumption of sodium, saturated fat, and added sugar across different meals in the USA. However, the development is limited and suffers from several reporting inaccuracies and confusion regarding the data. For instance, the student states that added sugar snacks cover 42% and later mentions diner has 23% of additional glucose, but the formatting and organization make comparisons very difficult to follow. Furthermore, there is no overview provided of the main trends or general comparisons across the three nutrients, which is a key requirement for Task 1. The overview and data selection remain disjointed, preventing the response from reaching higher bands. Therefore, it fits best at Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The response shows severe deficiencies in cohesion and paragraphing. The text is largely presented as a single dense block of text with virtually no clear paragraph structure to separate the introduction, body details, or different nutrients. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, with repetitive phrasings such as 'is covering the' and 'lies in the same percentage' appearing throughout. There is no clear overall progression of ideas, and sentences follow one another without logical transitional links. Pronoun referencing and overall text organization are weak, causing the reader to frequently lose track of which nutrient or meal is being discussed. This level of organization aligns with Band 4.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
Lexical resource is limited and heavily impacted by spelling mistakes and awkward word choices. The student makes frequent spelling errors, such as 'picharts', 'consumpution', 'suger', 'diffrent', 'ration', 'elemnts', 'considers', 'nutrious', 'deteririorating', 'soudium', 'appoximately', 'od', 'propotion', 'laying', and 'addational gulocose'. Vocabulary is repetitive, relying constantly on basic verbs like 'covers', 'lies', and 'is'. There is little evidence of less common lexical items used accurately, and the high frequency of vocabulary errors occasionally impedes communication and comprehension. This performance is characteristic of Band 4.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting almost entirely of simple or attempted complex sentences that contain severe structural errors. There is a complete lack of punctuation control, as the entire student response lacks proper capitalization and terminal punctuation, reading as a single massive run-on sentence broken only by arbitrary lowercase starts. Grammatical errors are pervasive, such as 'these elemnts considers as', 'excessive use deteririorating', 'soudium consuption in the dinner the covering the', and 'dinner the added sugar will be at 19%'. These frequent and fundamental errors cause substantial difficulty for the reader and demonstrate a lack of control over basic syntax. This warrants a Band 4.
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