Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-15
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The chart illustrates, the show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Overall, it can be seen that the sodium, saturated fat, and added sugar is around same level in breakfast of all over three meals. however, dinner rapidly decrease in sequence meal of three nutrients.
to commence with the sodium in the meal mostly affected the dinner most of around 43% compared to others while saturated fat too much affected the meal compared to others such as snack 21%, breakfast 16%, and lunch 26% dinner37%. On the other side, added sugar in meals if eaten too much so may be unhealthy whereas too much more effect by the snake 42%,
to conclude, it can show that the average ratio of nutrients as much as which included in all three meals affect both dinner and snack.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5
The student attempts to address the prompt by describing the charts showing the percentages of sodium, saturated fat, and added sugars in typical meals. However, the response contains several inaccuracies and misinterpretations of the data, such as claiming that 'dinner rapidly decrease' when dinner actually accounts for the highest percentages of sodium (43%) and saturated fat (37%). The overview is weak and confused, merely stating that nutrients are at 'around same level in breakfast'. While some main features are mentioned, such as added sugar peaking at snacks (42%), the overall information is inadequately selected and poorly communicated, resulting in a band score of 4.5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text is divided into short paragraphs, including an introduction, body, and conclusion, but the logical progression and coherence are severely compromised. Transitions such as 'to commence with' and 'On the other side' are used awkwardly and do not logically connect the ideas. Furthermore, referencing is unclear, and sentences often lack internal cohesion. For instance, the sentence 'to commence with the sodium in the meal mostly affected the dinner most of around 43% compared to others while saturated fat too much affected the meal...' strings multiple clauses together without proper grammatical linkage, creating confusion for the reader.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and frequently inappropriate or misused. Words like 'affected' are used incorrectly in place of verbs like 'accounted for' or 'comprised'. There are also lexical slips, such as 'snake' instead of 'snack'. While the student attempts to use some topic-related vocabulary such as 'nutrients', 'sodium', 'saturated fat', and 'added sugar', the limited and inaccurate range means that errors frequently strain the reader's understanding, placing this firmly in the band 4.0 category.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response exhibits a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most sentences contain significant grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('the sodium, saturated fat, and added sugar is'), tense errors ('dinner rapidly decrease'), and fragmented structures ('to commence with the sodium in the meal...'). Punctuation is also problematic, with missing capitalisation at the beginning of sentences and commas used incorrectly to link independent clauses. Errors are frequent and often distort meaning, aligning with the band 4.0 descriptors.
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