Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

Student answer (Band 4.0)

This pie charts illustrate the average proportion in typical meals of three various types of nutrients. Nevertheless, if we taken more in diet then it ought to be unhelathy

In sodium, it is less in proportion of breakfast as compared other two that is saturated fat and added sugar. While in lunch meal, they are nearly with each other approximately 26 percentage. Moreover, sodium and saturated fat is lesser in snack, but sugar is greater in amount in dinner all three nutrients has different percentages. Sodium has 43 percentage and saturated fat as 37 percentage while in added sugar, it is 23 percentage.

overall, we consumed these three nutrients according to our diet. If we take inn in improper way, then it would shows the effect in our body. Consequently, we need healthy body, not unhealthy body. as to my perspective, we need healthy body as compare to unhealthy body because if we have unhealthy body then we are not for giving good at all, and our body is always in tired mode. That's why we need a healthy body and healthy diet.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to summarise the visual data regarding the three types of nutrients across typical meals, but it fails to provide an accurate and comprehensive overview. The student misinterprets several data points and mixes up categories. For instance, the text states that sodium is 43% and saturated fat is 37% in dinner, but the descriptions of other data points are incoherent, such as claiming that lunch percentages are 'nearly with each other approximately 26 percentage'. Furthermore, the response digresses significantly at the end into personal philosophical opinions about having a healthy body rather than focusing strictly on reporting the main features and comparisons from the charts. This results in a weak task response that only partially addresses the prompt requirements.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The organisation of the text is very basic and lacks logical progression. Paragraphing is attempted, but the grouping of ideas is disjointed, especially in the second paragraph where multiple nutrients and meals are jumbled together without clear transitions. The concluding paragraph drifts into a personal opinion monologue rather than a coherent summary of data. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, such as 'Nevertheless' and 'Consequently', which creates confusion and interferes with the flow of information.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

Vocabulary is basic, repetitive, and limited in range. The student relies on simple terms like 'proportion', 'diet', and 'meals'. There are frequent word choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'if we taken more in diet then it ought to be unhelathy', 'take inn in improper way', and 'tired mode'. Spelling mistakes such as 'unhelathy' also occur. The vocabulary is barely adequate to convey the intended message and frequently impedes communication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple and attempted complex sentences that contain severe structural errors. There are constant issues with tense, subject-verb agreement, and preposition usage, such as 'This pie charts illustrate' instead of 'These pie charts illustrate' and 'as compared other than that'. Sentences like 'if we have unhealthy body then we are not for giving good at all' are ungrammatical and obscure meaning. Errors are very frequent throughout the text.

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