Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-22
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA
Student answer (Band 4.0)
There are three pie charts in front of me. Where they show the average percentges in typical meals of three types of nutrients. In this pie chat average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA.
In dinner sector the higher percentage is 43%, the second maximum is about 29%. The percentage of breakfast and snack must be equal.
In saturated fat sector, the percentage of dinner become ore higher it's about 37%. The least percentage of breakfast shows that in morning time people avoid saturated fat.
In added sugar sector, the number of snack shows that people use half of the amount of added sugar. Which are such a topic of serious discussion.
The conculsion is that now the people are unaware about their health. People used sodium and saturated fat at night. Which are such a method of serious discussion and we wnt to find a real solution.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to summarise the data from the three pie charts regarding sodium, saturated fats, and added sugars in the USA. However, it falls significantly short of a well-developed Academic Task 1 response. The introduction contains conversational framing ('There are three pie charts in front of me') and grammatical errors rather than a clear paraphrase of the prompt. While the student mentions some specific figures (e.g., 43% for dinner sodium, 37% for saturated fat, and 42% for snacks regarding added sugar), the reporting is disjointed and lacks a clear, cohesive overview of the main trends. Furthermore, the final paragraph lapses into subjective commentary ('now the people are unaware about their health') rather than objectively reporting visual data. Due to underdeveloped reporting and missing comparative analysis, it meets the criteria for Band 4.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0
The text is divided into short paragraphs, but the logical progression and overall coherence are weak. The opening sentences are confused and fail to set up a logical structure. Cohesive devices are largely absent or misused, such as abrupt transitions between sentences ('In dinner sector...', 'In saturated fat sector...'). There are repetitive structural patterns, and referencing is poor, making it difficult to follow the relationships between the data points. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal organization of ideas lacks clarity and flow. This corresponds to a Band 4.0 level of coherence and cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
Vocabulary is basic and repetitive, with several spelling and word choice errors (e.g., 'percentges', 'chat' instead of chart, 'conculsion', 'wnt'). The student relies on simple terms and direct translation or repetition of words from the prompt ('sodium', 'saturated fats', 'added sugars'). Phrases like 'the number of snack shows that people use half of the amount' demonstrate limited control over lexical collocation and precision. The vocabulary is minimally adequate to convey basic concepts, but frequent lexical errors and lack of less common vocabulary place this at Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences predominate, and attempts at complex or relative clauses are frequently faulty (e.g., 'Where they show the average percentges...', 'Which are such a topic of serious discussion'). There are frequent errors in basic grammar, verb tenses, and sentence fragments (e.g., starting sentences with 'Which are...'). Punctuation errors also occur. These errors are frequent and occasionally obscure the intended meaning, matching the descriptors for Band 4.0.
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