Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA
Student answer (Band 4.0)
According to the chart . In USA , the average pecentage of sodium can be given. In snack there are 14 % of sodium is used. In breakfast there are also 14 % of sodium is used .In launched there are 29 % of sodium is used and ,In dinner there 43 % of sodium is used.In dinner there are large number of sodium is used in, from the other catageroise. And the average of saturated fat, In snacks there are 21 % saturated fat is used .In breakfast there are 16 % of saturated fat is used .In launch there are 26 % of saturated fat is used and, In dinner there are 37 % of satyrated fat is used . From all catagories , In dinner there are large number of saturated fat is used then other . The average of sugar is , In breakfast there are 16 % of sugar is added . In lunch 19 % of sugar is added. In dinner 23 % of sugar is added and , In snack there are 42 % of sugar is added in . In snack there are large amount of sugar is added in other then catagories
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response attempts to cover the main features of the charts regarding the percentages of sodium, saturated fats, and added sugars in typical meals in the USA. However, the presentation is extremely repetitive and lacks an overall summary or overview of the main trends. The student lists individual meal categories for each nutrient (e.g., 'In snack there are 14 % of sodium is used... In breakfast there are also 14 % of sodium is used') without synthesizing the data effectively. Furthermore, there are minor transcription inaccuracies in spelling meal names, such as 'launched' instead of 'lunch'. Because the candidate does report the data points for all three nutrients and makes basic comparisons, it fulfills the minimal requirements of the task, but lacks the structured reporting expected at higher bands.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The text suffers from a severe lack of paragraphing, being written as a single dense block of repetitive sentences. There is no clear overall progression or logical structuring of ideas; instead, the essay moves from one nutrient to the next using simplistic, repetitive transitional phrases like 'In [meal] there are...' or 'From all categories...'. Cohesive devices are severely limited, highly mechanical, and frequently misused. Pronoun referencing and substitution are absent, leading to a choppy and difficult reading experience.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive throughout the response. Words such as 'used', 'added', and 'categories' are recycled constantly (e.g., 'large number of sodium is used', 'large number of saturated fat is used'). There are also spelling errors ('pecentage', 'launched', 'catageroise', 'satyrated', 'catagories') and awkward collocations, such as using 'large number' with uncountable nouns like sodium and saturated fat instead of 'large amount' or 'highest proportion'. The lexical range is strictly limited to the immediate prompts and basic descriptions.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical structures are extremely repetitive and simple, relying almost entirely on rudimentary subject-verb-complement clauses (e.g., 'In breakfast there are 16 % of sugar is added'). There is a persistent failure in basic sentence construction, resulting in double-verb errors like 'there are 14 % of sodium is used'. Punctuation is faulty, with spaces appearing before commas and periods, and numerous run-on clauses linked improperly. Complex structures are entirely absent, and frequent grammatical errors impede smooth reading.
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