Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The bar chart illustrates the average percentage in typical meals of nutrients may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Average percentage of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA.

Overall, when sodium added in a dinner for 43% in USA its the highest percentage, while the lowest meals is snack and breakfast is 14% in sodium. saturated fat and added sugar in grater change to snack.

In lunch, the percentage of sodium is 29% and normally change in saturated fat 26% and added sugar is 19% only. dinner was the highest percentage in sodium is 43% and saturated fat is 37% rose the added sugar is 23% decreases.

saturated fat and added sugar show both same percentage in breakfast is 16%. luch and dinner are slightly decreases in added sugar. afterthat, it saturated fat snack was 21%, breakfast 16%,lunch 26% and dinner 37% in USA.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The response addresses the task only minimally, failing to meet the minimum word requirement of 150 words by 13 words (not counting the 14 words copied directly from the prompt). While the writer attempts to report data from the charts, the selection of features is incomplete and confused. Key figures are mentioned, such as dinner sodium at 43% and added sugar for snacks at 42%, but the reporting is disjointed and fails to provide a clear, well-supported overview. The position is unclear and details are inadequately developed, limiting the overall effectiveness of the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

Information and ideas are not arranged coherently. The text is broken into short, choppy paragraphs with a lack of logical progression. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, resulting in abrupt transitions between sentences and ideas (for example, 'afterthat, it saturated fat snack was...'). Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the intended comparisons across the three nutrients. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal structure of the paragraphs fails to guide the reader through the data in a logical or structured manner.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, employing a limited range that struggles to adequately describe the statistical data. There are noticeable lexical errors and awkward word choices, such as 'grater change' and 'luch', which reflect weak control of word form and spelling. While communication is occasionally achieved, the limited range and frequent inaccuracies constrain the precision required for an academic task, restricting the response to a foundational level of lexical performance.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The grammatical range is very limited, relying heavily on simple structures and basic sentence patterns. Attempts at more complex structures frequently result in faulty syntax, missing verbs, and non-standard phrasing, such as 'when sodium added in a dinner for 43% in USA its the highest percentage'. Errors in prepositions, subject-verb agreement, and punctuation are frequent and often distort the meaning, causing considerable difficulty for the reader in parsing the intended grammatical relationships.

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