Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie charts below illustrates the percentage of Sodium, Saturated fat and added sugar in daily consumed food items in USA, where all of the mentioned nutrients are proved to be unhealthy if consumed in a large proportion.

Overall, the prominent feature shown here is the percantage of all the mentioned nutrients are almost a bit more than one in ten in breakfast meal eaten by people in the United states of America.

A glance of the pie charts, reveals that the breakfast meal of the day have almost similar percantage of sodium, saturated fat and added sugar(14%, 16%, 16%). Whereas, the first two nutrients ranges at a similar percetange(29%, 26%) in lunch while added sugar has slumped upto 19% in meal had by people in the USA at noon.

Further analysis of the graph shows that the most dramatic percatange change is by snacks demonstrating different share in different nutrients. Sodium has the share of 14%, saturated fat has 21% and suprisingly, added sugar has accounted the double of saturated fat(42%). Moreover, percantage of unhealthy nutrients in dinner has declined gradually if compared. Sodium holds the largest percatange share at 43% , saturated fat at 37% and lastly, added sugar at only 23% respectivly.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main meal patterns and report the figures accurately: dinner has the highest shares of sodium and saturated fat (43% and 37%), while snacks account for the most added sugar (42%). The overview also notes that breakfast figures are similar, which is a relevant feature. This gives the response a clear basis in the charts. However, the overview focuses mainly on breakfast rather than summarising the strongest overall contrasts, and the claim that dinner percentages have “declined gradually” is unclear because the figures compare different nutrients, not a sequence. To strengthen the report, state directly that dinner leads for sodium and saturated fat, whereas snacks lead for added sugar, and describe the comparisons without implying a trend over time.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and two paragraphs comparing meal categories. Information generally progresses from breakfast and lunch to snacks and dinner, and linking expressions such as “Whereas,” “Further analysis,” and “Moreover” help signal relationships. This makes the report coherent overall. Some connections are mechanical or unclear, however. “Whereas” begins a fragment-like contrast, and “Moreover” introduces dinner figures that are better presented as a direct comparison rather than an additional point. The overview also does not prepare the reader for the key snack-versus-dinner contrast. Use clearer topic sentences and group the data around the main patterns, while ensuring each linking word accurately expresses the relationship between ideas.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant chart-reporting vocabulary, including “share,” “holds the largest,” “accounted,” and “dramatic,” and the meaning is generally recoverable. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “daily consumed food items,” “slumped upto,” and “the double of saturated fat.” Repetition of “percentage” also limits flexibility, while misspellings such as “percantage,” “percetange,” “suprisingly,” and “respectivly” are noticeable. These issues make the language less precise and occasionally slow the reader, despite an adequate range of basic terms. Aim for standard data-reporting phrases such as “the proportion of,” “fell to,” and “twice the figure for,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of simple and more complex sentences, including comparisons with “while” and “if compared,” and most of the chart information remains understandable. However, errors in agreement, articles, and sentence construction recur. For example, “The pie charts below illustrates” should use a plural verb, and “the breakfast meal … have” also has incorrect agreement. “The first two nutrients ranges” similarly needs a plural verb, while “added sugar has accounted the double” lacks a grammatical construction for the comparison. Some punctuation is also awkward, particularly the comma after “A glance of the pie charts.” Work on subject–verb agreement and build comparisons with complete, controlled clauses; this will make your varied sentence attempts more accurate.

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