Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-08

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

Student answer (Band 7.0)

The pie charts illustrate the mean percentages in ordinary meals of three types of nutrients, including sodium, saturated fats and sugars, all of which may be noxious if eaten too much.

Overall, the dinner accounted for the largest proportion of sodium consumption and saturated fat, While, breakfast generally represented the lowest proportion. Added sugar, however, is highest at snack category.

Looking at the details, dinner comprised for the greatest share, at 43% and 37% of sodium consumption and saturated fat intake, following by lunch made up for 29% and 26% respectively. Morever, breakfast and snack recorded at 14% of sodium intake, meanwhile, the figures reached 16% and 21% of consumption of saturated fat.

Turning to the added sugar, snack accounted for the higest segment, stood at 42%. The second largest percentage was dinner formed at 23%. Whereas, lunch constituted 19% of the total. The least significant portion was breakfast represented at 16% respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.5

The response selects the main patterns accurately: dinner has the highest shares of sodium and saturated fat, while snacks lead for added sugar. It also supports these comparisons with relevant figures, including 43% and 37% for dinner and 42% for snack sugar, and reports the remaining meal categories. This gives the overview a clear basis in the data. To make the account more fully developed, include a direct comparison of the contrasting distributions—for example, added sugar is much more concentrated in snacks than sodium or saturated fat, whereas sodium is more concentrated at dinner. Also, the opening refers to “sugars” rather than the chart’s specific “added sugar,” and the overview’s claim that breakfast is generally lowest needs qualification because snacks and breakfast tie for sodium.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 7.0

The four-part structure is effective: an introduction, a concise overview, and separate detail paragraphs for sodium/saturated fat and added sugar. The progression from the broad pattern to supporting figures is easy to follow, and linking expressions such as “Overall,” “Looking at the details,” and “Turning to” help signal the stages. Some connections are less smooth or are punctuated awkwardly. “While” is incorrectly capitalised after a comma in the overview, and “Whereas” begins a fragment in the final paragraph. The repeated use of “accounted for,” “comprised,” and “constituted” also makes the reporting feel somewhat formulaic. Use fewer transition markers and connect comparisons more directly, so cohesion remains clear without drawing attention to itself.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

There is an adequate range of task vocabulary, including “proportion,” “share,” “intake,” and “segment,” and the writer attempts more formal alternatives such as “comprised” and “constituted.” However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for describing chart data: “noxious” is an unsuitable substitute for “unhealthy,” “comprised for” is not the correct collocation, and “following by” should be “followed by.” “Mean percentages” is understandable but less natural than “average proportions,” while “higest” is a spelling error. These slips do not prevent the reader from understanding the comparisons, but they limit precision and naturalness. Aim for accurate, conventional chart-reporting phrases rather than choosing synonyms that do not fit the context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

The response uses a mix of simple statements and more complex structures, including the overview contrast “Added sugar, however…” and the sentence comparing dinner and lunch figures. Most relationships between the data remain understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “dinner comprised for” has an incorrect preposition, and “snack accounted for the higest segment, stood at 42%” combines clauses without a grammatical link. “The second largest percentage was dinner formed at 23%” is also structurally faulty, while “breakfast represented at 16% respectively” has an unnecessary “respectively.” Punctuation and capitalisation need attention too, as in “saturated fat, While.” Build accuracy by checking each sentence for a complete verb structure and using parallel forms when listing figures.

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