Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The charts below reveals the statistics of average percentages in typical meals of three types such as sodium, saturated fat and added sugar as well, these are may be harmful if eaten too much. It can be seen clearly that there is a close compitition amoung the given figures, whereas the trends reflect an evident fluctuations across the percentage-line.
The statistics now need to be illustrated individually-cum-comparatively. To begin with sodium, there was a just below of half of the total in dinner which was 43% and showed declined in lunch, breakfast and snack which were 29%, 14% and 14% respectively. However, saturated fat was low in dinner than sodium which was below 40%. Snacks and breakfast showed a slight incresed as 21% and 16% as with respect to meal.
On the other hand, added sugar represented a maximum proportion in snacks which was 42% minimum proportion in breakfast which was 15% . in comparison, added sugar was lower in dinner and lunch that snacks and breakfast
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
You identify the three nutrients and report several key figures accurately, including sodium at 43% for dinner and 29% for lunch, and added sugar at 42% for snacks. However, the response only partly summarises the charts: it lacks a clear, accurate overview of the main contrasts, such as dinner being highest for sodium and saturated fat while snacks lead for added sugar. Some comparisons are incomplete or unclear, and the breakfast figure for added sugar is given as 15% rather than 16%. The discussion of saturated fat also omits its highest and lowest meal shares. To strengthen the response, state the overall patterns first, then compare the most important values accurately and cover all three nutrients more evenly.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
There is some organisation: the response begins with an introduction, then discusses sodium and saturated fat before moving to added sugar. Basic linking phrases such as “To begin with” and “On the other hand” show an attempt to guide the reader. However, progression is not consistently clear. The opening refers to “close competition” and “fluctuations” without explaining the comparisons, and the final sentence is incomplete in its comparison of added sugar. Connections between ideas are sometimes awkward, while “individually-cum-comparatively” does not clearly signal how the information is organised. Use a concise overview paragraph followed by clearly separated comparisons, and ensure each sentence completes one understandable point.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “average percentages,” “proportion,” and the nutrient names, so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, which sometimes makes the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “close compitition,” “percentage-line,” “showed declined,” and “maximum proportion in snacks.” Spelling errors such as “amoung” and “incresed” also reduce precision. Aim for straightforward, accurate chart language rather than elaborate phrases: describe figures as “accounted for” a share, “was highest” or “was lowest,” and “fell” or “rose” only when describing a genuine change.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including a contrast introduced by “whereas” and a sentence beginning “To begin with sodium.” However, complex constructions are often faulty, and frequent errors make some relationships hard to interpret. For example, “The charts below reveals” has subject–verb disagreement, while “these are may be harmful” combines incompatible verb forms. The phrase “there was a just below of half” is not grammatically complete, and the final sentence lacks clear sentence boundaries and punctuation. Practise building accurate simple sentences first, then add subordinate clauses. Check agreement, verb forms, articles and punctuation, and make sure each sentence has a complete main clause.
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