Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The diagrams demonstrates the proportion of each substances which includes; added sugar, saturated fat and sodium in food and can be harmful if one eats in excessive amount. Dinner is the wholesome meal which have great amount of nutrients which has been shown in the chart. It has highest amount of sodium and saturated fat and relatively less added sugar however it is being evident, snack has great quantity of sugar in it.

While other source of nourishment keeps fluctuating depending on the type of intake throughout the day. Sodium is found 14% in dinner followed by 29% in lunch, 14% in snack and 43% in the final meal of the day. As a matter of fact, saturated fat exists 16%, 26%, 21% and 37% in breakfast, lunch, snack and dinner respectively.

Added sugar is poured ub almost everything which is packaged so it has proportion 16% in the morning meal, 19% in the second, 42% in the third which is unhealthy and 23% in the last meal of the day. Nutrients are good if taken in a balanced way but excessive proportion can cause diseases.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the main pattern that dinner accounts for the largest shares of sodium and saturated fat, while snacks contribute the most added sugar. However, the overview is not consistently accurate: dinner is described as the “wholesome meal,” and the claim that it has “great amount of nutrients” is not a suitable interpretation of percentages of potentially unhealthy nutrients. Several figures are assigned to the wrong meals. For sodium, 14% is breakfast and snack, 29% lunch, and 43% dinner, but your sequence labels 14% as dinner and 43% as the final meal. For added sugar, 42% belongs to snacks, not the third meal. Select the key comparisons accurately and report each figure against the correct meal.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response has a basic paragraph structure and moves from a general description to details about the three nutrients. Linking phrases such as “As a matter of fact” and “however” show an attempt to connect ideas. Nevertheless, the progression is difficult to follow because meal order changes between sentences: the sodium figures are listed in an unclear sequence, and “the second,” “the third” and “the last meal” make the added-sugar comparison hard to track. Some transitions are also vague, as in “While other source of nourishment keeps fluctuating.” Organise the body by nutrient or meal, keep the same meal order throughout, and use clear references such as “breakfast” and “snacks” rather than ordinal labels.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant vocabulary, including “proportion,” “saturated fat,” “added sugar” and “excessive,” and you attempt a range of expressions to describe the data. However, several choices are imprecise or unnatural for a chart report. “Wholesome meal” suggests a health judgement that the chart does not support, while “nutrients are good” and “added sugar is poured up” are unsuitable or unclear. “Source of nourishment” and “type of intake” are also unnecessarily vague. Prefer precise reporting language such as “accounts for,” “share,” and “contributes,” and avoid adding claims about packaging or disease that are not shown in the visual.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including a contrast with “however” and a clause beginning “which includes.” However, errors in sentence structure and agreement occur frequently enough to make parts of the response awkward. For example, “The diagrams demonstrates” has a subject–verb agreement error, and “each substances” has incorrect number agreement. The opening sentence also uses a semicolon awkwardly before a list, while “Dinner is the wholesome meal which have” contains errors in article use and verb agreement. Some long sentences combine several ideas without clear grammatical control. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, singular and plural forms, and shorter sentence patterns when reporting comparisons.

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