Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie charts compares the data of sodium, saturated fat, and added sugar consumed by Americans.

Overall, The dinner accounted for highest proportion of sodium and saturated fat, Whereas snack was higher in added sugar. in contrast, Breakfast recorded for lowest proportion in terms of all three nutritions.

At breakfast, the sodium, saturated fat and added sugar were 14%, 16% and 16%, respectively. At lunch, sodium accounted for 29% of total. While, saturated fat represented for 26% and added sugar made up comparetively small proportion, at 19%.

Dinner contained highest percentage of sodium, at 43%. Followed by saturated fat 37%. However, added sugar contains only 23% in this meal. For snack, sodium and saturated fat were 14% and 21% respectively. While, the percentage of added sugar is much higher at 42% of total. The intake of this nutrition should be in control to stay away from unhealthy lifestyle and eat dietory food.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main pattern accurately: dinner has the largest shares of sodium and saturated fat, while snacks lead for added sugar. The overview also notes breakfast’s low figures, and the body reports the chart values correctly, including dinner’s 43% sodium and snacks’ 42% added sugar. This gives the response a clear, relevant account of the data. To make the summary more fully developed, compare the meal patterns more directly—for example, note that dinner is the leading meal for two nutrients, whereas snacks are the leading meal for the third, and that breakfast and snacks tie for the lowest sodium share. The final advice about controlling intake is not shown by the charts; keep the report focused on describing the data.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs covering breakfast/lunch and dinner/snacks. This helps the reader follow the figures, and sequencing the meals is a sensible approach. However, some links are mechanical or incorrectly punctuated, such as “While, saturated fat…” and the sentence fragment “Followed by saturated fat 37%.” The overview’s contrast is useful, but the body could group comparisons more consistently rather than listing each meal in turn. Use complete sentences and clearer transitions to show how the figures relate—for instance, contrast the dinner and snack patterns directly. The final health recommendation also interrupts the progression from chart description to conclusion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “accounted for,” “represented,” “proportion,” and “percentage,” and the nutrient names are generally clear. However, several word-choice, collocation, and spelling problems make the language less precise: “data of” is awkward for describing chart content, “recorded for” is not the right phrase, and “made up comparetively small proportion” is inaccurate in form and spelling. “Nutrition” is also used where the specific nutrient or nutrient intake is meant, while “dietory food” is unclear. Aim for accurate, natural reporting phrases and check spelling and word forms. A more controlled vocabulary would make the comparisons sound more academic without needing unnecessarily complex wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, and most of the figures remain understandable. There are, however, some errors in agreement, articles, sentence boundaries, and punctuation. For example, “The pie charts compares” has a plural subject with a singular verb, while “the highest proportion” needs an article in the overview. Capitalisation after commas is inconsistent in “Whereas” and “in contrast.” Several clauses are also left as fragments: “While, saturated fat represented…” and “Followed by saturated fat 37%.” Practise joining these ideas into complete sentences and punctuating subordinate clauses correctly. Greater control of these patterns would make the report smoother and more accurate.

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