Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie charts illustrate the average proportions of the nutrients intake during typical meals in the USA.

Overall, the reports show the comsumption of the sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in the breakfast, lunch, snack and dinner. Breakfast had high amount of saturated fats and added sugars, while sodium was least. Lunch and dinner had sodium in large quantity, followed by the saturated fats and low amount in added sugars. Snack were comsumed with more added sugars, followed by the saturated fats.

Breakfast with large amount of saturated fats and added sugars that accounted for 16%, while sodium at 14%. During dinner and lunch, sodium had major role which were at 43% and 29%, followed by the saturated fats represented 37% and 26%, however added sugars had minor role. Snack were comsumed large quantity with the added sugars accounted for 42%, followed by the saturated fats at 21% and least wre sodium at only 14%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main pattern accurately: dinner has the highest shares of sodium and saturated fat, while snacks lead for added sugar. The figures you give for breakfast, lunch, dinner and snacks are generally consistent with the charts, and you make relevant comparisons across meals. This meets the task well, with a clear overview and appropriate selection of key features. However, some points are less fully reported: for example, the lunch and dinner discussion says added sugars had a “minor role” without giving their percentages, and the overview’s claim that breakfast had a “high amount” of saturated fat and sugar is not as informative as comparing it with other meals. Include the missing figures and make the overview more precise to strengthen coverage.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction to an overview and then to meal-specific details. This gives the reader a coherent overall route through the information. However, progression within the overview is not always clear: the sentence beginning “Lunch and dinner had sodium in large quantity” combines two meals and several nutrients without clearly distinguishing their rankings. The final paragraph repeats points already made in the overview, and connectors such as “while,” “followed by” and “however” sometimes link ideas mechanically rather than showing precise relationships. Organise the details into clearer comparisons—for example, group breakfast and snacks, then compare lunch and dinner—and use references that make each meal’s figures easy to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “average proportions,” “accounted for” and “represented,” and the reader can understand the main comparisons. However, the range is limited by repeated wording such as “large amount,” “major role” and “followed by,” while several collocations are unnatural for describing percentages: nutrients are not usually “consumed with more added sugars,” and sodium does not have a “major role” in a meal. There are also spelling errors in “comsumption,” “comsumed” and “wre,” which reduce accuracy. Choose precise terms for proportions and rankings, and check spelling carefully; this would make the description more natural and exact.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more developed sentence forms, and most of the intended comparisons remain understandable. Some grammatical errors nevertheless affect clarity. For example, “Breakfast with large amount…” is a sentence fragment, while “Snack were comsumed” has a subject–verb agreement problem. In “sodium had major role which were at 43% and 29%,” the relative clause does not agree with its subject and the sentence structure is difficult to follow. Articles and plural forms are also inconsistent, as in “the sodium” and “the saturated fats.” Build complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement and article use. More accurate control of these patterns would improve readability.

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