Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The pie charts illustrate the proportion of Sodium, Saturated fat and Sugar in typical meals consumed in the USA, all may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Overall, the dinner contains large proporion of Sodium and saturated fat and the breakfast contains the least amount of all three nutrients.

Sodium is the dominent part of the dinner which solely accounted at 43%. While the lunch contains 29% of sodium, the remaining; snacks and breakfast collectively contains less amount of it as each holds 14% share.

Saturated fat is the large proportion of dinner which usually consumed in the USA and shares 37% proportion. The proportion of Saturated fat in the lunch is considerably higher than that snack and breakfast, at 26%, 21% and 16% respectively.

Sugar is added mostly in the snack as 42% of snacks contained it. Dinner contains 23% of sugar, while lunch contains 19% of it. Breakfast again remained as the least meal which contained this nutrient and stucked at 16%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.5

You select the main patterns accurately: dinner has the highest shares of sodium (43%) and saturated fat (37%), while snacks account for the most added sugar (42%). The overview also identifies breakfast as the lowest meal for all three nutrients, which is supported by the figures, and the body includes relevant comparisons across meals. This gives the report clear coverage and generally well-supported key features. To make the account more fully developed, describe the contrast in added sugar more explicitly—for example, snacks are almost twice dinner’s 23% share—and avoid imprecise claims such as “the dominant part” when describing a meal’s share. Also, “42% of snacks contained it” misrepresents the chart: it shows the proportion of added sugar by meal, not the proportion of snacks containing sugar.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, a brief overview, and separate paragraphs for the three nutrients. This makes the comparisons easy to locate, and linking expressions such as “while,” “respectively,” and “again” help connect information. The organisation is coherent, but progression within sentences is not always smooth. For instance, “the remaining; snacks and breakfast” uses punctuation that interrupts the comparison, and the repeated pattern of describing dinner, lunch, and breakfast makes the report somewhat mechanical. The overview could also group the two dinner-led nutrients against the snack-led sugar pattern, giving the reader a stronger organising framework. More varied, accurate transitions and clearer sentence boundaries would make cohesion more flexible.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range of task vocabulary, including “proportion,” “accounted,” “collectively,” and “considerably higher,” and the meaning is generally clear. However, several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or repetitive: “dominant part” and “large proportion” are awkward for describing chart shares, while “42% of snacks contained it” changes the meaning of the data. “Sugar” also omits the chart’s important qualification, “added.” Spelling errors such as “proporion,” “dominent,” and “stucked” show that written control is not yet consistent. Aim for precise chart language such as “accounted for,” “represented,” and “the share of added sugar,” and check spelling and collocations during revision.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of simple and more complex sentences, including clauses introduced by “while” and “as,” and most of the data remains understandable. However, some grammatical errors recur and limit accuracy. The opening sentence lacks a linking verb in “all may be unhealthy”; write “all of which may be unhealthy.” In “the dinner contains large proportion,” an article is needed, and “which usually consumed” lacks a finite verb. The sentence beginning “While the lunch contains…” is a fragment, and “the remaining; snacks and breakfast” has faulty punctuation. There is also inconsistent singular/plural agreement in “the breakfast contains” and “the least meal.” Review articles, complete clauses, and verb forms, then proofread punctuation to improve control.

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