Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The above piecharts elucidate the three nutrients added into various meals in average day life and might be harmful if eaten at a larger extent.

From the first piechart, sodium was added of about 29% in lunch meal. While, in meals such as breakfast and snack has a identical preservation of 14%. Moreover, dinner has ranked the highest with contribution of 43% which is almost half of the whole day meal. From the second piechart, we seen a saturated fat contributes about 16% slightly higher than the previous one. While, a steady increase has been noted in snack and lunch whereas a significant contribution is observed by dinner meal which is exactly same by combining both snack and breakfast.

From the last piechart, we observe a significant contribution of snack in presence of added sugar distribution of about 42% which is exactly same by adding both lunch and dinner. At last, breakfast contributes 16% similar to the distribution of saturated fat.

To conclude, the presence of sodium and saturated fat commonly present in dinner meal while, in case of added sugar we see a gradual rise in snack meal as people always prefer to have added sugar meal in evening.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main pattern that dinner accounts for the largest shares of sodium and saturated fat, while snacks lead for added sugar. Several figures are also reported accurately, including sodium at lunch (29%), dinner (43%), and added sugar in snacks (42%). However, coverage is uneven: the saturated-fat figures are not clearly set out, and the claim that dinner’s share is “exactly same” as snack plus breakfast is inaccurate (37% versus 37% is correct, but the wording should make that comparison explicit). The conclusion adds an unsupported explanation that people prefer sugary food in the evening. A clearer overview and more precise reporting of the key comparisons would make the response more complete and better grounded in the charts.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, a paragraph for each nutrient, and a concluding statement. This makes the information generally easy to follow, and phrases such as “From the first piechart” help signal movement between charts. However, the organisation is somewhat mechanical, with repeated openings and frequent “While” and “Moreover” links that do not always connect complete or contrasting ideas clearly. Some comparisons are difficult to follow, particularly the saturated-fat sentence about a “steady increase” and dinner being equal to snack plus breakfast. Grouping the meal patterns across nutrients—for example, dinner’s high shares versus snacks’ added-sugar share—would create a more purposeful progression and clearer cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of vocabulary, including “contribution,” “distribution,” “significant,” and “gradual rise,” and the reader can generally understand the topic. However, several choices are unnatural or imprecise for describing chart data: “elucidate” is an awkward substitute for “show,” “preservation” does not mean a percentage share, and “added of about 29%” is not an appropriate collocation. Repeated use of “contribution” also makes the description less precise. Aim for straightforward, accurate chart language such as “accounted for,” “represented,” and “proportion.” More natural collocations and fewer ambitious but unsuitable words would improve clarity and control.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including comparisons and clauses introduced by “whereas” and “while.” However, errors in sentence construction and agreement are frequent enough to make some statements difficult to process. For example, “While, in meals such as breakfast and snack has a identical…” is an incomplete clause with incorrect agreement and article use; “we seen” also has an incorrect verb form. In “a saturated fat contributes,” the article and subject construction are faulty, while several sentences use commas where a full stop or a properly joined clause is needed. Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check agreement, articles, and punctuation before adding complex clauses.

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