Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The pie charts demonstrates, three types of food in each meals, while this nutrients are bad for our health when we eaten a lot.
Overall, in all meals the charts illustrates that Breakfast and lunch are slightly at the same average in Sodium , Satured fat moreover Added sugar, while the percentage of dinner is bigger slightly than Satured fat, and double bigger than Added sugar , while Satured fat is rose significantly than Added sugar in dinner , on the other hand we have the opposite in snack in Added sugar is dramatically rose than Sodium and slightly up than Satured fat .
To begin with, in Added sugar the unhealthy snack are double bigger than snack in Satured fat , when theres an opposite in dinner percentage we have 37% in Satured fat and 23% in Added sugar , while in other meals the percentage stay almost the same.
On the other side, theres a considerable difference of percentages between Sodium and Added sugar specially in snack we have a significant up with 42% when in Sodium just 14%, furthermore a sharply increase in lunch, while we have an almost percentage in breakfast stay the same .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5
You identify several relevant patterns, especially dinner’s high shares of sodium and saturated fat and the prominence of added sugar in snacks. The figures you do give—37% versus 23% at dinner and 42% versus 14% for snack sugar and sodium—match the chart. However, the overview is difficult to interpret and includes inaccurate comparisons: breakfast and lunch are not “at the same average” across nutrients, and dinner’s sodium share (43%) is not double its added-sugar share (23%). Several key values and comparisons are omitted, including the highest sodium figure and the relative meal patterns for saturated fat. Select the main highs and lows, report them precisely, and avoid unsupported claims such as a “sharply increase in lunch.”
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response has an identifiable opening, an attempted overview, and two detail paragraphs, so there is some organisation. However, the progression is not consistently clear: the overview combines several comparisons in one long sentence, and the later paragraphs shift between nutrients and meals without a clear organising principle. Connectors such as “while,” “on the other hand,” and “furthermore” are frequent, but some do not show the intended relationship; for example, “furthermore, a sharply increase in lunch” does not clearly explain which figures are being compared. Grouping information by meal or by nutrient, then using a few precise linking phrases, would make the comparisons easier to follow.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You attempt vocabulary suited to describing data, including “considerable difference,” “significantly,” and “percentage,” and you use terms for the three nutrients. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make the meaning unclear. Phrases such as “double bigger,” “slightly up,” “significant up,” and “the unhealthy snack” are not natural ways to describe chart proportions. There are also spelling errors in “Satured” and “theres.” Use standard comparison language such as “twice as high,” “higher than,” and “accounted for,” and check spelling and word forms. More precise vocabulary would help distinguish increases from differences in static percentages.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt longer sentences with contrast clauses, but complex structures are often faulty, and errors sometimes make the comparisons hard to understand. For example, “The pie charts demonstrates” has subject–verb disagreement, while “when we eaten a lot” has an incorrect verb form. The sentence beginning “Overall” contains several clauses joined without clear grammatical control, and “in Added sugar the unhealthy snack are…” has problems with sentence structure and agreement. Articles, plurals, and punctuation are also inconsistent. Practise writing shorter, complete comparison sentences first, then combine them with accurate clauses using “whereas” or “while.” This would improve control while retaining some structural variety.
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