Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-13

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie charts depicts the proportion of nutrients in a meal, which can be harmful for health if consumed to much in USA. Overall the percentages of all the nutrients varied. The highest intake of sodium and saturated fat was in dinner. While sugar was more common in snaks. However, the small proportion was occupied by breakfast intake in all three nutrients.

Sodium and saturated fats have highest percentages in dinner around 37-43% respectively. While the level of added sugar was around 42% in snacks instead of dinner which was 23%. On the other hand, the level of sodium, saturated fat an added sugar in breakfast was 14-16% respectively,

In addition to, sodium have high level in lunch was 29% followed by saturated fat 26%, and sugar 19% respectively.

In conclusion the highest proportion of these nutrients was seen in dinner, gradually decrease in lunch respectively, while the sugar level was at the peak in snacks.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You identify the main pattern accurately: dinner has the largest shares of sodium and saturated fat, while snacks account for the most added sugar. The figures you give for dinner, snacks, breakfast and lunch are broadly consistent with the charts, and the overview makes the key contrast clear. You also compare the meal categories rather than listing figures in isolation. However, the overview is somewhat general: “the percentages of all the nutrients varied” adds little, and the conclusion’s claim that nutrients “gradually decrease in lunch” is unclear and does not describe every nutrient accurately. To strengthen the report, state the key rankings more precisely—for example, sodium is highest at dinner and tied lowest at breakfast and snacks, while added sugar rises from breakfast to snacks.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an overview to details about dinner, breakfast and lunch. This gives the reader a coherent overall arrangement, and phrases such as “On the other hand” and “In addition” help signal comparisons. However, some links are mechanical or awkward: “In addition to” does not introduce the next point correctly, and the final sentence repeats the overview without clarifying the trend. The sentence beginning “While the level…” is also a fragment, which interrupts the flow between ideas. Grouping the figures into two clear detail paragraphs—one for sodium and saturated fat, and one for added sugar—would make the progression easier to follow and reduce repetition.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “percentages,” “intake,” “level,” and “peak,” so the topic is generally clear. There is some attempt to vary wording, but several choices are imprecise or unnatural for describing chart data. “The small proportion was occupied by breakfast intake” is an awkward way to express a low share, while “sugar was more common in snacks” is less precise than saying that snacks contained the largest proportion of added sugar. Spelling and word-form slips such as “snaks” and “to much” also reduce accuracy. Aim for concise, conventional collocations such as “accounted for,” “represented,” and “the highest share,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts both simple and more complex forms, including comparisons and clauses introduced by “which” and “while.” However, control is inconsistent, and several errors affect sentence accuracy. “The pie charts depicts” has a subject–verb agreement error, and “While sugar was more common in snaks” is a dependent clause presented as a sentence. The phrase “Sodium and saturated fats have highest percentages” is missing an article, while “sodium have high level” has agreement and article problems. Punctuation also leaves some ideas incomplete, notably the sentence ending “respectively,”. Practise checking each sentence for a complete main clause, correct subject–verb agreement, and articles before singular countable nouns.

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