Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given pie chart present the minimum types of goods of 3 food which are non highgenic but eaten a lot.

Overall, People who eat snack with added sugar is highest then other two meal are 42 percentage and other meal saturated fat is 21 percentage in snake the list is sodium only 14 percentage in snake . Lunch cantain higesh in sodium 23 percentage but in saturated fat it cantains 26 percentage the list in added sugar lunch contain only 19 percentage. Dinner which cointain 42 percentage the highest amount in sodium but in saturated fat it contain 37 percentage and the list is again added sugar which contain list from this two meals only 23 percentage.

The sodium contain the lowest in snacks and breakfast 14 percentage but added sugar contain the highest percentage in snack and saturated fat contain 21 percentage in snake but the saturated fat and added sugar contain same in break fast 16 percentage.

The meal which contain the high amount is 43 percentage in dinner on the other side saturated fat contain 37 percentage the second highest meal but the list percentage in added sugar contain only 23 percentage in USA

so, this were the proper system of meals sodium,saturated fat and added sugar

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify several relevant patterns, including that dinner has the largest shares of sodium and saturated fat, while snacks account for the most added sugar. However, the report only partially summarises the charts: it repeats some points and does not give a clear, accurate overview of all three nutrients. There is also a significant data error: lunch sodium is reported as 23%, whereas the chart shows 29%. The statement that dinner contains 42% sodium is also inaccurate; the figure is 43%. Some comparisons are correct, such as saturated fat at 37% for dinner and 26% for lunch, but other details are unclear or incomplete. Organise the key highs and lows accurately and avoid unsupported or confusing claims.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has some paragraph breaks and uses basic linking expressions such as “Overall,” “but,” and “on the other side.” Nevertheless, the ideas do not progress in a clear sequence. The overview is mixed with individual figures, and the same dinner and snack comparisons are repeated in later paragraphs. References such as “the list” and “this two meals” make it difficult to tell which nutrient or meal is being discussed. A clearer structure would be to give a concise overview first, then group the main comparisons by nutrient or by meal. Use linking words to show precise contrasts rather than relying on repeated “but” constructions.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “highest,” “lowest,” and the names of the three nutrients. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spellings make the report difficult to understand. For example, “the minimum types of goods” does not describe the chart, while “snake” appears to be an incorrect form of “snack.” Phrases such as “the list in added sugar” and “proper system of meals” are not natural ways to describe proportions. Aim for accurate terms such as “share,” “proportion,” and “account for,” and use them consistently. Check spelling carefully, especially for key chart labels, so the reader can follow your comparisons.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts longer sentences and some comparisons, but sentence structures are often faulty, and errors frequently make relationships between figures unclear. For example, “The given pie chart present” has subject–verb disagreement, while “Lunch cantain higesh in sodium 23 percentage” lacks a clear grammatical structure. Articles, plurals, and verb forms are also inconsistent, as in “the meal which contain the high amount.” Most sentences rely on simple patterns joined by “but,” with limited control of more varied structures. Build shorter, complete sentences first, ensuring each has a clear subject and verb; then practise combining comparisons with accurate clauses and punctuation.

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