Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

Student answer (Band 4.0)

sO THE CHART BELOW SHOWS US THE AVERGAE PERCENTAGE, THAT WHAT MEAL OR THING WOULD BE HARMFUL IF EATEN TOOMUCH. as per my knowledge the sugar isn't that batter for health, and in present time the sugar is being more used in almost every food or meal mainly in childerns food, Saturated fat is shown in second chart which shows us why peoples gain fat, and the main reason of fat is the 21% of snacks 37% Dinner 16% Breakfast and 26% Lunch, So if we avoid eating too much of snakes or reduse the use of it in our daily life I think we can overcome this thing and stay fit.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response makes only a minimal attempt to summarise the charts and does not cover the three nutrients. It gives figures for saturated fat, but omits the sodium and added-sugar data, and offers no clear overview of the main patterns—for example, dinner is highest for sodium and saturated fat, while snacks are highest for added sugar. The comments about sugar in children’s food, weight gain, and advice to avoid snacks are personal claims or recommendations rather than chart-based reporting. The saturated-fat figures are accurate, which is a useful starting point, but the task requires selecting and comparing the chart’s main information. The response is also 38 words below the required minimum, leaving too little space to report the charts adequately.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic sequence from introducing the chart to discussing sugar and then saturated fat, and the figures are grouped together in one sentence. However, the response is a single long paragraph with no clear overview or organised comparison across the three nutrients. Linking expressions such as “and” and “So” connect ideas, but the shift from sugar to fat and then to personal advice is abrupt. The opening is difficult to follow, and references such as “the second chart” do not help the reader understand the full set of information. Organise the response into an introduction, an overview, and a short body comparing the meal figures; use clear links such as “whereas” to show contrasts.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant topic vocabulary, including “sugar,” “saturated fat,” “snacks,” and “percentage,” and it attempts to describe health effects. However, the range is limited and several choices or spellings make the meaning less precise, such as “thing,” “batter,” “snakes,” and “overcome this thing.” Informal wording like “as per my knowledge” and “stay fit” is also unsuitable for a neutral chart summary. Focus on accurate chart language and avoid unsupported health claims. Terms such as “proportion,” “accounted for,” and “highest share” would help describe the data more precisely, while careful spelling and formal phrasing would make the response clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to combine ideas using clauses and conjunctions, for example in “the main reason of fat is the 21% of snacks 37% Dinner…,” but sentence boundaries and grammatical relationships are often unclear. The opening, “the chart below shows us the average percentage, that what meal…,” is not a well-formed sentence, and the long final sentence joins several ideas without effective punctuation. There are also problems with articles, agreement, and sentence construction, as in “the sugar is being more used.” These errors make parts of the message difficult to follow. Use shorter, complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and practise accurate comparative structures such as “Dinner accounts for 37%, compared with 26% at lunch.”

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