Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The three pie charts illustrate the proportion of the average in typical meals sodium, saturated fat, and added sugar, all of which may be unhealthy eaten too much in the US.

Overall, dinner accounted for the largest figure in sodium while breafast and snack had the smallest fiugure. Meanwhile, once again dinnar represented the highest contributor in saturated fat and brakfast had lowest figure in the provided pie chart. Add sugar, snack recorded the largest figure while breakfast once again remain smallest proportion.

In terms of sodium, dinnar accounted for the largest proportion of unhealthy food consume at 43% followed by, lunch 29%. Together, these two items made up 72%, which was more than half of total consumer. Breakfast and snack both represented the similar figure at, 14%.

For saturated fat, once again dinnar accounted for the largest proportion at 37% followed by, lunch at 26%. Once again together remained two items contributed at 63%, which was over a half of the pie chart. Snack represented 21% which was 5% higher than breakfast, at 16%.

Along the added sugar, snack accounted for the highest proportion at 42% followed by, dinnar as second contributor, at 23%. For lunch 19% which was 3% higher than breakfats, at 16%. These snack and dinnar accounted for just over half of all consumer, at 65%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main patterns accurately: dinner is the largest source of sodium and saturated fat, while snacks lead for added sugar. The key figures and comparisons are generally correct, including the 72% combined sodium share for dinner and lunch and the 65% for snacks and dinner in added sugar. This gives the report a clear overview and relevant supporting detail. To make the coverage more complete, compare the three nutrients more directly—for example, note that dinner’s share declines from sodium to added sugar, whereas the snack share rises sharply. Some statements such as “largest figure” are imprecise, and the overview could summarise the contrast between meal patterns more clearly. The response already selects and reports the main features, but fuller synthesis would strengthen it further.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for each nutrient. This makes the information easy to locate, and the figures generally follow a sensible order from largest to smaller contributors. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical because “once again” and “followed by” recur repeatedly. Some links are also awkward or incomplete, such as “For lunch 19%” and “Together remained two items contributed at 63%,” which interrupt the flow. Use clearer sentence connections and vary the way comparisons are introduced. A more integrated comparison across the charts, rather than treating each one almost entirely separately, would also create stronger progression while preserving the clear overall arrangement.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportion,” “accounted for,” “contributor,” and “represented,” so the reader can understand the intended comparisons. However, the range and control are limited by repeated wording and several inaccurate or unnatural expressions. “Largest figure” is vague where “largest share” would be more precise, and “unhealthy food consume” does not express the chart’s meaning naturally. There are also noticeable spelling errors, including “breafast,” “dinnar,” and “breakfats,” which reduce the accuracy of the report. Aim for precise terms such as “share of intake” and “percentage,” and check spelling carefully. More varied, accurate collocations would make the description clearer and more fluent.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentences, including comparisons and clauses with “while,” and the main message is usually understandable. However, some sentence structures are incomplete or incorrectly formed. For example, “For lunch 19% which was 3% higher than breakfast” lacks a main clause, while “Together remained two items contributed at 63%” has an unclear structure. There are also errors in articles, agreement, and verb forms, as in “breakfast once again remain smallest proportion” and “which was more than half of total consumer.” Punctuation around phrases such as “followed by, lunch” is also inaccurate. Build complete clauses first, then connect them with varied structures; this would improve accuracy without sacrificing complexity.

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