Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

Student answer (Band 6.5)

The pie charts illustrate the mean proportion in typical meals of three categories of nutrients, all of which may cause health problem if eaten excessively.

Overall, it is clear that the dinner accounts for the highest proportion of sodium and saturated fat, followed by, the snack making up the second highest share of saturated fat and added sugar. whereas breakfast contains the least proportion of all three nutrients.

Dinner accounts for the highest proportion of sodium and saturated fat with a proportion of 43% and 37% respectively. In addition, snack make up the second highest share of saturated fat and added sugar containing 21% and 42% respectively.

Furthermore, The breakfast contains identical proportion of saturated fat and added sugar. whereas slightly low proportion of sodium around 14%. Lunch contributes a balanced proportion of nutrients ranging from 19% to 29%, sodium 29%, saturated fat 26%, and added sugar around 19 %.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0

You identify the main pattern accurately: dinner has the largest shares of sodium and saturated fat, while snacks lead in added sugar. The figures you give for these comparisons are correct, and you also report the breakfast and lunch values, so the response covers the chart’s key categories. The overview is useful, but it contains an important overgeneralisation: breakfast is not the lowest meal for every nutrient, since snacks have the lowest sodium share at the same 14%, and breakfast and snacks tie. Also, the claim that snacks have the second-highest share of added sugar is incorrect because snacks have the highest share. Correcting this and making the overview more precise would strengthen an otherwise relevant summary.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure, moving from an introduction and overview to details about dinner, snacks, breakfast and lunch. This makes the information easy to locate. However, cohesion is sometimes mechanical or faulty: “In addition” and “Furthermore” introduce points that could be connected more precisely, while “whereas” is used after a full stop and begins a fragment-like continuation. The overview also repeats the dinner and snack comparisons in the next paragraph, limiting progression. Grouping the meal comparisons more deliberately—for example, dinner and snack patterns together, followed by breakfast and lunch—would reduce repetition. Check punctuation and linking words so that each relationship between figures is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You use an adequate range of chart-reporting vocabulary, including “illustrate,” “proportion,” “accounts for,” “share” and “contributes.” These choices generally communicate the data, and “mean proportion” shows an attempt at a more formal register. Some word choices and collocations are less natural or precise, however: “health problem” is awkward in this context, and “snack make up” has an incorrect form. Repetition of “proportion” also makes the description less flexible. At this level, meaning remains clear, but greater control of collocation and more varied terms such as “percentage” or “figure” would improve precision and fluency.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 6.0

You attempt a mix of simple and more complex structures, including the overview clause “it is clear that…” and the comparison using “with…respectively.” Most of the data remains understandable, but some grammatical and punctuation errors are present. For example, “snack make up” has a subject–verb agreement error, and “the dinner” and “The breakfast” use articles awkwardly. The sentence beginning “whereas slightly low proportion…” is incomplete, and the full stop before “whereas” disrupts the sentence structure. There are also unnecessary spaces and inconsistent capitalisation after punctuation. Aim to make each comparison a complete sentence and check agreement, articles and sentence boundaries.

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