Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The given chart bar illustrate about 3 typical things of nutrients, named sodium, saturated fat, added sugar. we would like to define fristly 3 things. sodium (Na) being with the help of salty stone. and it is used in over foods daily lifes. and sugar(c12 h22 o11) beign with the help of glucose.

overall both products use every day in USA and it should be unhealthy for over body. if we eaten too much.sodium snack 14% in a day then saturated fat is almost 21% then sugar snack 42% if we equall all out of 100% it is 77% this percentage use of sodium is very harmfull for body. same as lunch out of 100% according to bar 74% we use it is always very detrimined for over health.and then we use at dinner time we use 103% so they have careat issue for health.

we need to maintain over health and use these 3 thing in a limit that is best for dite as well health.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

The response makes a limited attempt to discuss the chart, mentioning the three nutrients and some meal figures, but it does not clearly summarise the main patterns. The most important contrast is that dinner has the highest shares of sodium and saturated fat, while snacks account for the largest share of added sugar; this overview is missing. Some figures are reported correctly, such as snack added sugar at 42% and dinner sodium at 43%, but the response combines unrelated meal percentages into totals such as 77%, 74% and 103%, which do not represent meaningful chart comparisons. The explanations of what sodium and sugar are, and the advice about health, are not required by the task and take space away from reporting the data. Focus on an accurate overview and comparisons between meals.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response, beginning with an introduction and using “overall” before discussing figures. However, the ideas do not progress in a clear sequence: definitions of nutrients lead into health advice, while the chart data are grouped through unclear calculations rather than by nutrient or meal. The long central section is difficult to follow, especially the movement from snack percentages to lunch and dinner totals. Paragraphing is also limited, so the introduction, overview and detailed comparisons are not clearly separated. Use a short introduction, a distinct overview, and one or two paragraphs comparing the chart figures. Linking words should show genuine relationships between data rather than simply connect unrelated points.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant chart vocabulary, including “percentage,” “sodium,” “saturated fat” and “added sugar,” and attempts evaluative language such as “unhealthy” and “harmful.” However, vocabulary is often inaccurate or unsuitable for describing a chart. Phrases such as “salty stone,” “over foods,” “detrimined” and “careat issue” make parts of the meaning unclear, while “bar” misidentifies the visual as a bar chart. Repetition of “use” and “thing” also limits precision. Aim for standard data-reporting expressions such as “accounts for,” “share,” “highest proportion” and “compared with.” Check spelling and choose words that describe the figures rather than adding unsupported health claims.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts both simple statements and longer sentences, but control is inconsistent, and errors frequently make relationships between ideas difficult to understand. For example, “we would like to define fristly 3 things” has an unclear sentence structure, while “if we eaten too much” uses an incorrect verb form. The sentence beginning “sodium snack 14% in a day then saturated fat…” lacks clear grammatical links between its parts, and punctuation is often missing or misplaced. There are also problems with articles, agreement and sentence boundaries. Build accurate short sentences first—for example, “At dinner, sodium accounts for 43%”—then combine comparisons using controlled structures such as “whereas” or “while.”

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