Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

Student answer (Band 4.5)

We now that everything in high limit is dangerous for human life.We should try to use nutrients in limited value.Sodium is a name of nutrient which we use in dinner for 43% .If we compare it with remaining nutrients its amount is high than remaining nutrients.We use it 14% in breakfast time.It is acceptable amount of sodium in breakfast time.We use it in lunch time for 29% which is a normal range.We use it also 14% in snack time which is normal range.Sodium is a important nutrient of our body.Saturated fat is also a name of nutrient important for good human health.We use it 16% in breakfast time which is a good range.We use it 26% in lunch which is a normal range .We use it at snack time for 21% which shows that it is important for our body.We use it for 37% at dinner time.We use it for normal growth otherwise nothing else.Sugar is also important for our body.We use it at breakfast time for 16% which is good range for our body.We use sugar at snack time for 42% .We use sugar at lunch time for 19%.We use it at dinner in the range of 23%.

These can dangerous for our body in high limit.We should try to use in limited value.If we compare these nutrients sugar is more important than other nutrients.Equality is important in every instant of life in also food.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You include figures for all three nutrients and most meal categories, and several are accurate, such as sodium at dinner (43%) and added sugar in snacks (42%). However, the response does not clearly summarise the chart’s main features: it gives a sequence of meal-by-meal statements rather than an overview of the contrasting patterns. Some interpretations are unsupported or misleading, including calling amounts “acceptable,” “normal,” or “good” ranges, and claiming sugar is “more important” than the other nutrients. A key comparison—that dinner is highest for sodium and saturated fat, while snacks are highest for added sugar—could have formed a clear overview. The response therefore reports some relevant data but addresses the summarising purpose only minimally.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response follows a basic order, discussing sodium, saturated fat, and then sugar, so the reader can identify which nutrient is being described. However, ideas are not arranged into a clear report structure: there is no distinct overview, and the final comments about health and “equality” do not develop the chart description. Repeated sentence openings such as “We use it…” and “We use…” make the progression mechanical, while links between comparisons are limited. Grouping the information by the most important pattern—for example, dinner’s high sodium and saturated-fat shares, then the snack peak for sugar—would create a more coherent progression. Clear paragraphing for an overview and supporting details would also help.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Vocabulary is basic and highly repetitive, with “use,” “important,” “normal range,” and “good range” recurring throughout. Some wording makes the intended meaning unclear or unsuitable for describing chart data: “high limit,” “limited value,” and “Equality is important in every instant of life in also food” do not communicate precise comparisons. The response does use relevant terms such as “nutrient,” “sodium,” and “saturated fat,” and the meal labels are generally clear. To improve, use a small range of accurate reporting language, such as “accounts for,” “proportion,” “highest,” and “lowest,” and avoid judging the figures as healthy or acceptable when the chart only presents percentages.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

Most sentences use a simple subject–verb pattern, and the repeated structure allows some figures to be understood. However, grammatical errors are frequent and sometimes make the relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Examples include “We now that” (the intended form is “We know that”), “its amount is high than,” and “These can dangerous,” which lack correct verb forms or comparisons. Articles and sentence boundaries are also problematic, as in “Sodium is a important nutrient” and the run-together opening, “life.We should.” There is little variety in sentence structure, and punctuation spacing is inconsistent. Practise accurate simple sentences first, then combine comparisons using controlled forms such as “whereas” and “compared with.”

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