Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The pie charts illustrates the averege percentage in several meals of three types of nutrients and all of which may be unhealthy if eaten soo much.

Overall, the proportion of three types of nutrients sodium, saturated fat and added sugar. Per nutrients in four types meal percentage and which are breakfast, snack , dinner and launch. Snack is the largest ratio in added sugar of nutrients. Dinner is the peak proportion in sodium and Launch is the highest percentage in same nutrients.On the other hand, breakfast is the respectively same percentage in three nutrients.

In sodium, the proportion side is the biggest perentage is dinner at 43%and launch at 29%. Breakfast and snack are the same ratio 14% respectively.

In saturated fat, here is also peak percentage is dinner at 37% , runner up launch at 26%, snack 21% and lastly lowest percentage is 16%.

In added suagar, snack is the rechest percentage and the ration is 42%, dinner 23% , launch 19% and breakfast only 16%. Conversely, one thing see that , breakfast is always lowest percentage and most of the time dinner is peak perentage.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main pattern that dinner accounts for the largest shares of sodium and saturated fat, while snacks lead for added sugar, and you report most figures accurately. However, the overview is unclear and includes a significant misreading: breakfast is not the lowest share for every nutrient, since snacks are also 14% for sodium and breakfast is not lowest for added sugar (16% versus 19% for lunch). The final claim that dinner is the peak “most of the time” is broadly supported, but the comparison that breakfast is “always lowest” is not. To strengthen the response, give a concise, accurate overview first, then compare the key contrasts across all three charts rather than repeating individual rankings.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an overview followed by separate paragraphs for sodium, saturated fat and added sugar. This makes the chart categories easy to locate. However, progression is weakened by the overview’s fragmentary wording (“The proportion of three types of nutrients sodium, saturated fat and added sugar”) and by repeated ranking language such as “peak,” “runner up” and “highest percentage.” Some links are awkward or unclear, including “On the other hand” and “Conversely,” which do not establish a clear contrast in context. Organise the overview around the main comparisons, and use clearer transitions to connect details. A more direct sequence of overview, then grouped comparisons, would make the report easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-relevant terms, including “proportion,” “percentage,” “nutrients” and “respectively,” and the reader can generally identify the intended categories. However, vocabulary is repetitive and several choices are inaccurate or unnatural, which sometimes strains understanding. Examples include “the proportion side,” “the rechest percentage,” “runner up launch” and “the ration is 42%.” There are also spelling errors such as “averege,” “suagar” and “perentage.” Use standard chart language consistently, such as “share,” “accounted for” and “highest proportion,” and check spelling carefully. Avoid using “peak” or “richest” where a straightforward description of a percentage is more precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts an overview and several longer sentences, but grammatical control is weak and sentence structures are often incomplete or faulty. For example, “The pie charts illustrates” has subject–verb disagreement, while “Overall, the proportion of three types of nutrients…” is a sentence fragment. The sentence beginning “Per nutrients in four types meal percentage” is also difficult to interpret because its structure is incomplete. Missing spaces after figures and commas, as in “43%and” and “37% ,”, further affect readability. Build mostly clear simple sentences first, checking agreement and sentence completeness, then add a small number of accurate complex sentences to show range.

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