Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The chart below shows the information of three different types of nutrients, namely sodium, saturated fat and added sugar. If eaten too much it can be unhealthy, meals are shown in average percentages.

Overall, highest amount of sodium is available in dinner 43% whereas, added sugar is mostly consumed at snack time 42% and dinner had 37% of saturated fat in it.

Firstly, dinner had higher amount of sodium in it as one time meal with 43%, lunch in afternoon had 29% however, snack and breakfast both has 14% each, shows how much sodium is consumed by people of USA. moreover, saturated fat mostly is consumed in dinner with 37%, lunch is compartively less then dinner with 26% although, snack and breakfast had 21 and 16% each respectively.

Secondly, added sugar is completely contrast; at snack time sugar is consumed in highest amount with 42% whereas, dinner had 23% sugar in it and lunch and breakfast had 19 and 16% each respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover all three nutrients and report the main patterns accurately: sodium and saturated fat peak at dinner (43% and 37%), while added sugar is highest in snacks (42%). The overview identifies these key contrasts, and the body includes relevant figures for each meal. This meets the task well and shows some of the stronger feature selection expected at the next level. However, the overview could compare the distributions more explicitly—for example, noting that dinner is the leading meal for two nutrients, whereas snacks dominate added sugar. Some details are presented as a list rather than interpreted, and the opening comment about nutrients being unhealthy if eaten too much does not add useful chart information. A sharper synthesis would make the report more fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall structure: an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs that group sodium with saturated fat before discussing added sugar. This makes the information easy to locate, and sequencing within each nutrient is generally understandable. Cohesion is less controlled in places, however. The first body paragraph relies heavily on repeated “whereas,” “however,” and “although,” sometimes joining several comparisons into one long sentence. “Firstly” and “Secondly” signal order but do not clarify the relationships between the data, while “moreover” is awkwardly placed after a full stop. Use shorter comparison sentences and clearer links such as “By contrast” or “Similarly,” and ensure each paragraph develops one coherent comparison.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough topic vocabulary to communicate the chart, including “sodium,” “saturated fat,” “added sugar,” “average percentages,” and “consumed.” The repeated meal labels and percentages also keep the report precise. However, the range is limited, and several phrases are unnatural or imprecise, such as “higher amount … as one time meal,” “completely contrast,” and “sugar is consumed in highest amount.” “Available in dinner” is also an unsuitable collocation for describing a proportion. These choices do not prevent the reader from understanding the main comparisons, but they make the report less fluent and precise. Build a small set of natural chart-reporting phrases, such as “accounted for,” “the largest share,” and “by comparison,” and use them accurately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer comparative sentences, and the main figures remain understandable. However, control is inconsistent: several complex sentences are joined without clear grammatical boundaries, as in “If eaten too much it can be unhealthy, meals are shown in average percentages” and the long sentence beginning “Firstly, dinner had higher amount…”. There are also errors in articles and agreement, including “highest amount” without “the,” “both has 14%,” and “dinner had 37% of saturated fat in it.” Punctuation around “whereas” and “however” is often faulty, which makes some comparisons harder to follow. Practise writing one complete comparison per sentence, checking subject–verb agreement, articles, and punctuation before combining clauses.

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