Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given pie charts illustrate the average percentage of soudium, saturated fat and sugar in typical meals in United State of America which may be are not good for health.

By comparing all charts we get to know that the sodium and staurated fats has most concentration in dinner by 43% and 37% respestively. Although, sugar addition in dinner is 23% which is not as significant as it is in snacks. However, the sugar has most dominance in snacks which is 42%. on the other hand, sodium and saturated fat have quite low concentration in snack which are 14% sodium and 21% fat content.

Conversely, the breakfast has least fluctuations in all three components. Saturated fat and sugar addition are both same by 16% but the sodium is just 2% less than fat and sugar content respectively. The lunch on the other hand has a slightly more variation in sodium, fat and sugar content. Lunch contains 29% soduim, 26% fat content and 19% sugar.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main patterns accurately: dinner has the highest shares of sodium (43%) and saturated fat (37%), while snacks account for the most added sugar (42%). You also include relevant comparisons for breakfast and lunch, and the figures you report match the charts. This gives the response a clear, relevant account of the data. However, the overview is embedded in the body rather than clearly separated, and some comparisons are not fully explained—for example, the claim that breakfast has the “least fluctuations” is unclear, since the values are simply close together. To strengthen the report, state the overall contrasts directly at the outset and explain the key differences across all meals more precisely.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable progression: it first compares dinner and snacks, then discusses breakfast and lunch. Paragraphing helps separate these groups of information, and linking expressions such as “However” and “on the other hand” show an effort to connect comparisons. At times, though, these links are mechanical or do not express the relationship clearly; “Conversely” does not establish a clear contrast with the preceding point, and “Although” begins a sentence without a complete contrasting clause. The opening also does not provide a distinct overview. Organise the report around a concise overview followed by grouped comparisons, and use linking words only where their logical relationship is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “average percentage,” “concentration,” “dominance,” and “variation,” and the reader can generally understand the comparisons. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “sugar addition,” “most dominance,” and “least fluctuations.” Repetition of “content” and “fat” also limits precision. Spelling errors—including “soudium,” “staurated,” “respestively,” and “soduim”—are noticeable and weaken control of vocabulary. Aim for straightforward, accurate chart language such as “proportion,” “accounted for,” and “highest share”; check spelling carefully and avoid using more elaborate terms when a simpler expression is more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of simple and complex sentences, including comparisons introduced with “Although” and “which,” and the main data relationships are usually understandable. However, some sentence structures are faulty or incomplete. “Although, the sugar addition in dinner is 23%” is not a complete contrast, while “which may be are not good for health” contains an incorrect verb construction. There are also agreement and article problems in “the sodium and staurated fats has” and “in United State of America.” Punctuation and capitalisation are inconsistent, including the lowercase “on” after a full stop. Practise building complete comparison sentences and check subject–verb agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries; these corrections would make the report clearer and more controlled.

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