Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

Student answer (Band 6.0)

This chart illustrates the average proportion in typical meals of of three types of nutrients in usa.

Overall, The amount sodium and saturated fats had been highest in dinners in USA, However Snacks had been largest proportion in added sugar. Meanhile in the breakfast all three types were lowest simultaneouslty.

Sodium accounted for 43% in dinners in usa making it the highest source of nutrients followed by 29% in lunch while snack and break were in at 14% respectivally.

Saturated fat represented 37% proportion in dinner making it largest source of nutrients followed by lunch and snack at 26% and 21% whereas breakfast it contain only 16%.

Added sugar made up 42% in snacks the biggest soucres of nutrients, simultaneously dinner had 23% proportion while lowest was breakfast 16%.

In conclusion, The amount of breakfast was at same level in saturated fat and added sugar and Soduim have same level of snacks and breakfast.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main contrasts accurately: sodium and saturated fat peak at dinner (43% and 37%), while added sugar is highest in snacks (42%). You also report several supporting figures correctly, including lunch sodium at 29% and breakfast at 16% for saturated fat and added sugar. This gives the response a clear, relevant overview and covers the three nutrients. To make the account more complete and precise, compare the patterns across all meals more explicitly—for example, added sugar rises from breakfast to snacks, whereas sodium and saturated fat are lower at breakfast and highest at dinner. The final sentence repeats two equalities rather than adding a useful concluding feature, and “breakfast” being lowest for all three is not accurate because added sugar is lowest at breakfast, but sodium is tied lowest at breakfast and snacks.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for the three nutrients. This helps the reader follow the chart, and linking expressions such as “followed by” and “whereas” show attempts to compare values. However, progression is sometimes mechanical, with each paragraph following much the same pattern, and the final “In conclusion” repeats information rather than advancing the summary. Some connections are unclear, particularly “making it the highest source of nutrients,” which does not clearly refer to the meal share. Improve cohesion by grouping related comparisons—for instance, contrast dinner-heavy sodium and saturated fat with snack-heavy added sugar—and use concise references such as “this figure” where the meaning is clear.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “accounted for,” “represented,” “proportion,” and “followed by,” so the reader can understand the intended comparisons. However, the range is limited and several word-choice or spelling problems reduce precision: “source of nutrients” is not a natural description of a meal’s share, “break” is unclear, and “biggest soucres” contains a spelling error. There are also repeated phrases such as “making it the highest” and “largest proportion.” Aim for accurate collocations and vary the language used to describe percentages. For example, say that dinner “accounted for the largest share” of sodium, rather than calling it a source, and use “snacks” consistently as the meal category.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response includes simple statements and some attempts at more complex comparisons, such as “followed by lunch and snack … whereas breakfast…”. However, the structures are often incomplete or inaccurately formed, which sometimes makes relationships difficult to follow. For example, “Saturated fat represented 37% proportion in dinner” needs an article and a clearer grammatical pattern, while “whereas breakfast it contain only 16%” has an incorrect clause structure and verb form. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “Overall, The amount…” and the comma splice in the overview. Practise complete comparative sentences with consistent past or present tense, accurate articles, and clear punctuation; this will make your data reporting more controlled.

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