Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The three pie charts illustrate how the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients; sodium, saturated fat, and added sugar may be unhealthy in USA if they are eaten more than enough. Overall, sodium and saturated fat recorded as the unhealthy meals in dinner. However adding sugar in the snacks is also harmful for health.

The amount of sodium in dinner is recorded as 43% whereas, snack and breakfast utilize the same rate of sodium in food by 14%. The proportion of sodium in lunch is 29%.

However, the highest rate of saturated fat is consumed at dinner followed by 37%. In lunch, the average percentage of sodium is 26%. Snacks has 21% of saturated fat whereas breakfast has least amount of saturated fat by 16%.

Furthermore, snacks are known as the nutrient with the most amount of sugar with 42%. Breakfast is list as the least common type of food which include sugar. Dinner include 23% of sugar where lunch add 19%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover all three nutrients and report several key figures accurately, including sodium at 43% for dinner and 14% for breakfast and snacks, and added sugar at 42% for snacks. The overview also identifies dinner as the main source of sodium and saturated fat, while snacks lead for added sugar. This gives the reader a relevant summary, although the overview is imprecise in calling these nutrients “unhealthy meals” and does not clearly compare the overall patterns. Some details are less fully handled: for example, the saturated-fat sentence says “followed by 37%” without identifying the meal clearly, and the sugar comparison is presented less explicitly than the other data. A sharper overview and more precise comparisons would strengthen the report.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a coherent overall arrangement: an introduction and overview are followed by separate discussion of sodium, saturated fat and added sugar. This makes the information easy to locate, and linking expressions such as “Overall,” “However” and “Furthermore” help signal movement between points. Cohesion is sometimes mechanical or unclear, however. “However” begins two paragraphs without a clear contrast, and “followed by 37%” does not make the relationship between the meal and figure explicit. The final paragraph also shifts between breakfast, dinner and lunch without a particularly clear comparison. Use more precise links such as “By contrast” only where a contrast exists, and group figures around a clear comparison to improve progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a reasonable range of task-related vocabulary, including “proportion,” “average percentage,” “consumed” and “recorded,” so the main data can generally be understood. However, several word choices and collocations are inaccurate or unnatural: “unhealthy meals” confuses nutrients with meals, “utilize the same rate” is not a natural way to describe percentages, and “snacks are known as the nutrient” misidentifies the category. “Breakfast is list as the least common type of food” is also an awkward expression. These choices do not prevent the reader from following the report, but they limit precision and naturalness. Prefer standard chart language such as “accounted for,” “the proportion of,” and “the highest share.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including the opening sentence with a relative clause and comparisons introduced by “whereas.” Most of the figures remain understandable, but some grammatical errors affect accuracy. The opening has a faulty structure after “illustrate” (“how the average percentages …; sodium…”), and “saturated fat is consumed at dinner followed by 37%” has an unclear construction. There are also agreement and article problems in “Snacks has” and “Dinner include,” while “Breakfast is list” uses an incorrect verb form. Punctuation around the opening list and “whereas” is also inconsistent. Check subject–verb agreement and make sure each comparison has a complete, clearly structured clause.

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