Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie charts illustrate the average propotions in typical meals of three types of nutrients (Sodium, saturated fat and sugar), those nutrients are bad for health if we consumed in large scale.

Overall, we can seen that the proportions of sodium and saturated fat are highest in dinner whereas added sugar largely used in snacks. Aditionally, in all three parts breakfast shows the least amount.

On the one hand, sodium and saturated fat are dominate in dinner with a proportion of 43% and 37% respectively. On the other hand, added snack contains 42% of suger which is the highest proportioon of added suger. Moreover we can notice that, the percentage of sodium are similar in snack and breakfast while lunch contains 29% of sodium.

If we focused on saturated fat, lunch have the second largest proportion. In contrast, Snack and breakfast shows 21% and 16% respectively. Furthermore, dinner contains 23% of suger which is after snack proportion. Besides, breakfast and lunch illustrate the proportion of suger below 20%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main pattern accurately: dinner has the largest shares of sodium and saturated fat, while snacks account for the most added sugar. You also include several relevant figures, such as 43% and 37% for dinner and 42% for snack sugar, and your overview gives the reader a clear summary. This meets the task well, with some comparison and selection of key features. However, the claim that breakfast is the smallest in all three categories is not accurate: for added sugar, breakfast is 16%, below lunch at 19% but not the smallest meal share overall, since lunch is also above it and breakfast is indeed the smallest; more importantly, the overview could distinguish this pattern from the snack peak. Some details are less fully developed, particularly the sodium comparison and the relative meal shares for added sugar. Clarify these comparisons to make the summary more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and two detail paragraphs. The contrast between dinner’s high sodium and saturated-fat shares and snacks’ high sugar share is easy to follow, and phrases such as “On the one hand” and “In contrast” help signal relationships. However, the linking is sometimes mechanical or imprecise. “On the one hand” is not followed by a matching “on the other hand” comparison, and “Moreover we can notice that” adds little to the progression. The final paragraph shifts between saturated fat and sugar, which makes the comparisons less orderly. Grouping the data by nutrient, or comparing the same meal across nutrients, would create a more consistent progression. Use fewer formulaic transitions and make references such as “this proportion” explicit.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant chart vocabulary, including “proportions,” “percentage,” “highest,” and “second largest,” so the main information is generally understandable. There is also some attempt to vary wording rather than repeat the chart labels. However, several word-choice and collocation problems reduce precision: “added snack” does not clearly mean the share of added sugar in snacks, “dominant in dinner” is unnatural, and “used in snacks” is not an accurate way to describe a nutrient’s proportion. Spelling errors such as “propotions,” “Aditionally,” “suger,” and “proportioon” are noticeable. Aim for precise reporting phrases such as “accounted for” or “made up,” and check spelling carefully. More accurate collocations would make your vocabulary more flexible and natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of sentence forms, including a relative clause in the introduction and contrastive structures such as “whereas” and “In contrast.” Most of the intended comparisons can be understood, but some grammatical errors recur. For example, “we can seen” should be “we can see,” “lunch have” should be “lunch has,” and “breakfast and lunch shows” should be “breakfast and lunch show.” The opening sentence also has an unclear construction after the nutrient list, and “if we consumed” does not fit smoothly with the general statement. Punctuation is occasionally awkward, as in “we can notice that,” where the comma is unnecessary. Review subject–verb agreement and build clearer complex sentences; this will improve accuracy while preserving the range you are attempting.

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