Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The three pie chat compare the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, which may be unhealthy if eaten often or to much.

Overall, there are three nutrients if we take in adequate amount are not harmful, but people will consume it large quantity it will affect their health. The dinner is larges share in two of three nutrients. the exception being added sugar which has largely found in snack.

Sodium is leading in dinner which accounted to 43% higher than any other nutrients. Followed by lunch and breakfast, which recored 29% and 14% respectively. Snacks contain least sodium upto 14% ,with striking gap of more then 25%. Dinner ha slage propetion of saturated fat then any other meals. Whereas lunch and snacks has slighly identical figure, which account 26% and 21% respectively. Brackfast thas lowes saturated fat among all meals arround 16%.

Looking at remaining figures, Added sugar was exception with highest slice of snacks accounted to 42%. Breakfast was least add sugar meal identical to saturated fat 16%. Followed by breakfast and dinner , which recorded 16% and 23% respectively.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You identify the main pattern accurately: dinner has the largest shares of sodium and saturated fat, while snacks lead for added sugar. You also report several relevant figures, including sodium at 43% for dinner and added sugar at 42% for snacks. However, some comparisons are unclear or inaccurate. For example, “higher than any other nutrients” compares dinner’s sodium share with nutrients rather than with meals, and the claim of a “striking gap of more than 25%” does not match the sodium figures. The final sentence repeats breakfast and omits the 19% lunch figure for added sugar. Develop the overview and check each comparison against the chart so all three meal patterns are clearly and accurately summarised.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and two detail paragraphs, with the final paragraph turning to added sugar. This gives the reader a generally coherent route through the information. Linking phrases such as “Overall,” “Followed by,” and “Looking at remaining figures” help signal progression, although some are used mechanically or do not connect ideas accurately. The sodium and saturated-fat details are grouped together, then added sugar is discussed separately, which is a sensible arrangement. However, the repeated breakfast references in the final paragraph and the unclear comparison about a “striking gap” weaken the flow. Use clearer links between figures and avoid repeating information when moving from one nutrient to another.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of chart-reporting vocabulary, including “accounted to,” “striking gap,” “largest share,” and “exception,” and the reader can usually understand the intended comparisons. However, several word-choice, collocation, and spelling problems reduce precision: “pie chat,” “larges share,” “recored,” “ha slage propetion,” and “least add sugar meal” are examples. Some phrases are also unnatural, such as “Sodium is leading in dinner” and “Dinner ha slage propetion of saturated fat.” Choose standard data language and check spelling carefully; for example, use “accounted for,” “the highest proportion,” and “the lowest share.” More accurate phrasing would make your comparisons sound clearer and more academic.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use both simple statements and some attempts at more complex structures, such as “The exception being added sugar…” and “Whereas lunch and snacks…,” but control is uneven. Errors include missing or incorrect verbs and agreement, as in “people will consume it large quantity,” “lunch and snacks has,” and “Dinner ha….” The overview sentence beginning “Overall, there are three nutrients…” is also difficult to follow because its clause structure is incomplete. Punctuation and sentence boundaries need attention, particularly the lowercase “the exception” after a full stop and the comma spacing in “14% ,with.” Aim for complete subject–verb structures and check agreement and articles. These changes would make the range of sentence forms easier to understand.

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