Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The pie chart illustrates the ratio of typical meals of the given nutrients,all of these would unhealthy if eaten if a excessible quantity.

Overall,we dicussed that the sodium was high in the dinner and remains constant in the snack or breakfast,saturated fats are less in the breakfast and added sugar were also surged in the snack and low in the morning meal which are consumed by the people of USA in their daily routine and make comparison relevant.

At first,we looked at the numbers of sodium,saturated fat and adding sugar.The amount of sodium in the snack and breakfast are same in lunch it was sharply high but in dinner the level of sodium was surged to skyrocket.However,the saturated fat in snack and breakfast was higher than sodium and in lunch it showed declined as compare to the amount of sodium in the lunch but in dinner saturated fat was at the top of their three format but also less than sodium.

To commense with,the amount of added sugar in the breakfast was low or in the lunch the small amount of surged but in the dinner in the sugar level rose up to increasingly margin.In addition.the added sugar in the snack was jumped into the skyrocket.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You identify the main pattern that dinner accounts for the largest shares of sodium and saturated fat, while snacks contribute the most added sugar. However, several comparisons are vague or inaccurate: sodium does not simply “remain constant” in snacks and breakfast without stating that both are 14%, and the claim that saturated fat in breakfast and snacks is “higher than sodium” is true only for breakfast, not snacks (21% versus 14%). The overview also misses the key contrast that dinner leads for two nutrients, whereas snacks lead for added sugar. To strengthen the report, give accurate figures for the main comparisons and describe the overall pattern clearly; some details are currently under-developed or difficult to interpret.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, an overview and two body paragraphs, so there is an attempt to organise the information by nutrient. However, the progression is not consistently clear: the second paragraph moves between all three nutrients, and the final paragraph returns to added sugar without a clear link to the preceding discussion. Connectors such as “At first,” “However,” and “In addition” are used, but they do not always show the relationship between the data accurately. Some sentences also combine several comparisons, making the reader work to follow them. Grouping the figures into a clear dinner-versus-snack overview, then reporting the remaining meal comparisons in a logical order, would improve cohesion.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt a range of vocabulary, including “ratio,” “declined,” “surged” and “comparison,” but word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or repetitive. Phrases such as “surged to skyrocket,” “jumped into the skyrocket” and “rose up to increasingly margin” are not natural ways to describe percentages, and “adding sugar” is not the correct nutrient label. These choices sometimes obscure the intended comparison. Use precise, neutral language suited to chart reporting, such as “accounted for,” “was highest,” “increased” or “represented.” Check spelling and word forms as well, including “dicussed” and “commense,” so that the reader can focus on the data rather than decoding the wording.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

There is an attempt to use both simple and more complex sentences, but control is inconsistent and errors frequently affect clarity. For example, “all of these would unhealthy” is missing a verb, while “the amount of sodium in the snack and breakfast are same” has problems with agreement and article use. Several clauses are joined without clear punctuation, as in “in lunch it was sharply high but in dinner…,” and the sentence beginning “Overall” contains multiple ideas without a stable grammatical structure. Work on complete sentence patterns, subject–verb agreement, articles and punctuation. Shorter, accurately formed comparisons would help communicate the figures more reliably before you attempt longer structures.

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