Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The given charts show about The average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients ,all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

overall, It is perhaps unsurprising that,Dinner recored the highest figure,whereas breakfast remained the least significant lunch thoughout the period shown

firstly,compared to snack which recored 14% in sodium,sanak experianced a lower figure of 21% in Saturated fat and Soudium had eaten dinner approximantaly 43% and discreased 37% in saturated fat and more reduced 23% in added suragar. sodium was types of nutrients lunch around 29% after that increased 26% and more incre

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You identify the general topic and attempt to compare meal categories, including figures such as 43% for sodium at dinner and 37% for saturated fat at dinner. However, the overview is inaccurate: breakfast is not consistently the least significant category, since snacks account for only 14% of sodium while breakfast has 16% for saturated fat and added sugar; snacks are highest for added sugar at 42%. Several comparisons are incomplete or unclear, and the final sentence breaks off before reporting the remaining information. The response also contains only 77 words, below the required 150, so it cannot provide a sufficiently complete summary. Select the main highs and lows, state them accurately in an overview, and report the key figures for all three nutrients.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 3.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response, with an opening, an overview, and a paragraph beginning “firstly.” You also use a few linking expressions, such as “whereas” and “after that.” However, the ideas do not progress clearly: the overview combines several meal categories without a clear comparison, and the final sentence ends mid-thought (“and more incre…”). The long final section moves between sodium, saturated fat, and added sugar, making it difficult to follow which figures belong together. Use separate, clearly developed paragraphs—for example, one for the overview and one or two for grouped comparisons—and connect each figure explicitly to its nutrient and meal.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “average percentages,” “highest figure,” and the names of the nutrients, so the reader can recognise the subject. There are also attempts to vary wording with “remained” and “reduced.” However, spelling errors such as “recored,” “sanak,” “Soudium,” and “suragar” make key information harder to understand, while phrases such as “breakfast remained the least significant lunch” are unclear. “Experienced a lower figure” is also an awkward way to describe a chart value. Aim for accurate, conventional reporting language and check spelling carefully; terms such as “accounted for,” “stood at,” and “the highest proportion” would make comparisons clearer and more precise.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts more than simple statements, for example by using a contrast with “whereas” and a comparison introduced by “compared to.” These attempts show some awareness of sentence variety. However, sentence boundaries and punctuation are often uncontrolled: the opening has inconsistent capitalisation and spacing, and the final sentence runs together several clauses before stopping unfinished. The structure “which may be unhealthy if eaten too much” is copied from the prompt and does not help develop the chart description. Build complete sentences with one clear comparison at a time, use consistent capitalisation, and check that each sentence has a clear subject and verb and ends with appropriate punctuation.

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