Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The pie charts illustrate propotion analysis in types of food of three diffrent nutrients, all of which may be of poor health when taken too much.

Overall, it is clear that it was more dangerous when taken for dinner and favoured for breakfast. Notably, cosumtion decreased on lunch but was slight.

To begin with sodium. When sodium is consumed regularly on dinner it may cause much health problems as it accopunt for 43% , followed by lunch consumptio at 29% and least on breakfast and snack with same percentage of14%.

Saturated fat is another meal in US, which is dangerously when cosumed daily for dinner since it claims at 37%, moreover moderately dangerous for lunch and snack at 26% and 21% respectively however it was favourable fo breakfast accounting for 16%,

Lastly, is addd sugar which may become serously unhealthy in US when consumed as snack as its propotion is 42% followed by regular dinner consumption at 23%, lunch at 19% and last on breakfast representing 16%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You report the main meal patterns and include several accurate figures: dinner is highest for sodium (43%) and saturated fat (37%), while snacks lead for added sugar (42%). However, the overview is unclear and partly inaccurate. Saying nutrients are “more dangerous when taken for dinner” overlooks the snack peak for sugar, and “favoured for breakfast” does not describe what the chart measures. The claim that consumption “decreased on lunch” is also not a clear summary of the data. Your body paragraphs cover all three nutrients, but comparisons across them are limited and some descriptions, such as “moderately dangerous,” add an unsupported judgement. A clearer overview identifying the highest meal for each nutrient would make the response more complete and precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for sodium, saturated fat, and added sugar. This makes the information reasonably easy to locate, and transitions such as “To begin with” and “Lastly” signal progression. However, the overview does not clearly prepare the reader for the details, and the sequence within the saturated-fat paragraph becomes difficult to follow because several comparisons are joined in one long sentence. The final paragraph also begins with the awkward fragment “Lastly, is addd sugar.” Use complete topic sentences and organise each paragraph around a clear comparison. More precise linking, rather than relying mainly on sequencing phrases, would improve the flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You attempt a range of task-related vocabulary, including “account for,” “followed by,” “proportion,” and “consumption,” which helps communicate the figures. However, inaccurate word choice and spelling are frequent enough to make some phrases unclear or unnatural. For example, “propotion analysis in types of food” does not accurately introduce the charts, while “favourable for breakfast” and “moderately dangerous” are unsuitable descriptions of meal percentages. There are also misspellings such as “diffrent,” “cosumtion,” and “serously.” Aim for precise, neutral language used in data reports: describe a figure as a “share” or “percentage,” and say that a nutrient “accounts for” a proportion rather than judging a meal as dangerous.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences with clauses, but control is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make the intended relationships hard to follow. For instance, “Overall, it is clear that it was more dangerous when taken for dinner” has an unclear subject and an unsuitable passive construction; “Saturated fat is another meal in US” also has a faulty sentence structure. The saturated-fat sentence beginning “since it claims at 37%” runs on through several comparisons without clear punctuation, and “Lastly, is addd sugar” is not a complete sentence. Practise building accurate subject–verb sentences, using articles and prepositions consistently, and separating comparisons into shorter sentences. This will make your range of structures more effective.

See this exact question answered at other band scores. The same prompt compared across bands.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.