Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The pie charts illustrate the proportion of sodium saturated fat, and added sugar, which are taken by the American citizens in a day, which cause detrimental effects on human well-being if they taken excessively.

Overall, sodium and saturated fat are mainly used in dinner, followed by the lunch, while the added suagr is more common in snacks. All these three components are lower in breakfast.

In case of sodium, 43% is used in dinner which is highest in percentage, and 29% in lunch. For snacks and breakfast, sodium utilization is similar for both, which accounts 14%. Saturated fat that stands at 37% in dinner, and 26% for lunch, however in breakfast, fat concentration is only 16%, and it is lowest among them.

Added sugar is mainly used in snacks, 42% and it has highest in concentration, while for breakfast, it is 16% slightly high as compared with sodium and saturated fat. Dinner accounts 23% in added sugar.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You identify the main pattern accurately: dinner has the largest shares of sodium and saturated fat, while snacks lead for added sugar. The figures you report for sodium and added sugar are correct, and the comparison that breakfast is relatively low is broadly supported. This meets the task well, with some features reported more fully than others: the saturated-fat figures omit the snack share of 21%, and the overview’s claim that all three nutrients are lower at breakfast overlooks that added sugar is lowest at breakfast but its snack share is much higher. To make the summary more complete and precise, include the missing comparison and avoid implying that breakfast is uniformly the lowest meal across all nutrients.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a clear overall arrangement: an introduction, an overview, and separate paragraphs for sodium and saturated fat, then added sugar. This makes the main comparisons easy to follow. However, some linking and reference choices are awkward or mechanical. For example, “In case of sodium” and “For snacks and breakfast” do not connect the figures as smoothly as they could, while “which accounts 14%” leaves the reference unclear. The saturated-fat sentence beginning “Saturated fat that stands…” is also a fragment, interrupting the flow. Use complete sentences and clearer transitions, and group related meal comparisons consistently to create more continuous progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant task vocabulary, including “proportion,” “accounts,” “concentration,” and “detrimental effects,” and the reader can generally understand the comparisons. However, several choices are inaccurate or unnatural for describing chart data: nutrients are not “used” or “utilization” in meals, and “added suagr” contains a spelling error. “Highest in concentration” is also an imprecise way to describe a percentage share. The range is adequate for the task, but these collocation and word-choice problems limit precision. Prefer standard reporting language such as “accounts for,” “makes up,” “share,” and “is highest,” and check spelling carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, and the overall meaning is usually clear. Some grammatical errors remain, particularly in sentence construction and clause control. The opening sentence repeats “which” and ends with the incomplete pattern “if they taken excessively”; a correct form would be “if they are consumed excessively.” “Saturated fat that stands at 37% in dinner, and 26% for lunch” is a fragment, while “which accounts 14%” is missing the preposition “for.” There are also awkward article and preposition patterns, such as “in dinner.” Aim to make each sentence grammatically complete and check verb forms and prepositions, while retaining the range of structures you are attempting.

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