Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA
Student answer (Band 6.0)
"The pie charts illustrate the percentages of sodium, saturated fat and added sugar consumed
in different meals.
Regarding sodium, dinner accounted for the highest proportion at 43%, followed by lunch at
29%. Breakfast and snacks both represented 14%.
For saturated fat, dinner also recorded the highest percentage, at 37%, while lunch accounted
for 26%. Snacks made up 21%, whereas breakfast had the lowest proportion, at 16%.
In terms of added sugar, snacks accounted for the highest percentage at 42%. Dinner
represented 23%, followed by lunch at 19% and breakfast at 16%.And these are the different
percentages of sodium,saturated fats and added sugar which many people used in typical
meals in the United State of America.In general nner contained the highest proportions of
sodium and saturated fat, while snacks accounted for the largest percentage of added
sugar.These are the different unhealthy meals which many Usa people were used in daily
habits."
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 7.0
The response identifies the main pattern accurately: dinner has the highest shares of sodium and saturated fat, while snacks lead for added sugar. The reported figures also match the chart, including the equal 14% shares for sodium at breakfast and snacks. This gives the reader a clear overview and relevant comparisons across all three nutrients. The final comments about “unhealthy meals” and what people “used in daily habits” are less precise than the chart supports, since it shows nutrient percentages in meals rather than how many people consume them or their habits. Keep the focus on the distribution of each nutrient and avoid adding unsupported claims; a concise overview followed by the accurate comparisons would make the report more consistently focused.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response is organised by nutrient, which makes the comparisons easy to follow, and phrases such as “Regarding sodium” and “For saturated fat” signal each section clearly. However, the final overview is placed after the detailed figures and repeats information already stated, so the progression is less effective. The closing sentences also run together (“16%.And these…”) and shift abruptly from chart reporting to general claims. Use a clear overview near the beginning, then group the details in a logical order, and separate each sentence with correct punctuation. This would strengthen the overall progression and reduce repetition while retaining the useful category-based structure.
Lexical Resource: Band 6.0
There is an adequate range of task vocabulary, including “accounted for,” “represented,” “proportion” and “highest percentage,” which helps describe the data. Some repetition of “accounted for” and “percentage” makes the wording less flexible, while phrases such as “different unhealthy meals” and “many people used” are imprecise or unnatural for describing nutrient shares. “Snacks made up 21%” is clear, but the response could use more precise terms such as “contribution” or “share” to vary its descriptions. Choose vocabulary that refers directly to the proportion of each nutrient in a meal, rather than suggesting that the meals themselves are unhealthy or that the chart counts people.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5
Most of the data-reporting sentences use clear, controlled simple structures, for example, “Dinner also recorded the highest percentage, at 37%.” There are some errors in the later sentences that reduce accuracy: “And these are the different percentages…” begins awkwardly with a conjunction, and “many people were used in daily habits” has an incorrect verb construction. The missing space after “16%.” and the run-on connection between ideas also affect punctuation. The response relies mainly on short, similar sentence patterns, so it would benefit from a few accurately formed complex sentences, such as combining a comparison with “while.” Check verb forms and sentence boundaries carefully when adding the overview.
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