Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 17 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The pie chart illustrates the average percentages of sodium, saturated fats and added sugars in typical meals consumed in the USA.

Overall; In trhree pie chart the typical meals consumed in the usa was equall. They are 100% on sodium, 100% on saturated fat and in added sugar it was also 100%.

Looking at the; Average percentages of sodium on breakfast and snack was equall by adding them it was become 28%. Although, In lunch it consumed 29% While 43% was consumed by the dinner in the USA.

In the terms of; compared between the saturated fat and added sugar we can see in the figure on fat breakfast contain 16% and in added sugar it also consumed 16% on breakfast which are the lowest percentage on both chart. Futhernore, lunch obtain 26% and dinner consumed 37% on saturated fat. Moreover; in sugar lunch contain 19% and dinner has 23% consumed in USA.In last on fat snack obtain 21% and in sweets snack consumed 42% in the USA. By comparing the three chart they are all in 100% but in the four section they will converted as hihest and lowest percentage of number.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the three nutrients and report several relevant figures, including sodium at 29% for lunch and 43% for dinner, and the matching 16% breakfast shares for saturated fat and added sugar. However, the overview is unclear: saying the meals “was equall” and that each chart totals 100% does not explain the main pattern. The key contrasts are that dinner is highest for sodium and saturated fat, while snacks are highest for added sugar; breakfast is the lowest or joint-lowest in most categories. You also omit the 42% snack figure for added sugar until the final comparison, and some comparisons are difficult to interpret. A clearer overview and more accurate selection of the main features would make the report more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response has an introduction followed by an overview and detail paragraphs, and it attempts to group information by nutrient. This gives the reader some sense of structure. However, progression is difficult to follow because the overview is vague and the final paragraph moves between saturated fat and sugar without a consistent comparison pattern. Connectors and punctuation are often used mechanically or inaccurately, as in “Although,” and “Moreover;”, while “In the terms of” and “In last” do not clearly signal the relationship between ideas. The closing sentence repeats the point that the charts total 100% rather than synthesising the comparisons. Organise the details in a consistent order and use fewer, more precise linking phrases.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant topic vocabulary such as “sodium,” “saturated fat,” “added sugar,” “percentage,” and “consumed,” so the subject is generally recognisable. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, including “the typical meals … was equall,” “lunch obtain 26%,” and “in sweets snack.” Spelling errors such as “trhree,” “Futhernore,” and “hihest” also reduce clarity. Some repetition of “consumed” and “percentage” makes the report less precise. Aim for standard chart-reporting expressions such as “accounted for,” “represented,” and “the largest share,” and check spelling and the natural use of meal and nutrient terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentences, for example, “Although, In lunch it consumed 29% While 43% was consumed by the dinner.” However, complex constructions are often faulty, and errors in agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries occur frequently. Examples include “the typical meals … was equall,” “breakfast and snack was equall,” and “in the USA.In last,” where agreement and punctuation interfere with smooth reading. Several clauses also lack a clear grammatical subject, as in “in added sugar it was also 100%.” Use straightforward subject–verb patterns, such as “Dinner accounted for 43% of sodium,” and separate complete sentences with appropriate punctuation. More accurate control of these basic structures is needed.

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