Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-05

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.

Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

Some people say that to reduce the number time they fly every year. It good for those person who can't uport multy time traviling or not upord the air ticket , and also save hir time and money. Ssome time you are out of country and our company have face some difecuelt satuation so some time can't backto company on time.

I agre tith this statment enviromental benefits of this development outweight the disadvantages for individuals and busnesses. Because when you have own businesses and you fly many time of the year for your businesses trife or tour, also spend of money and west of time, You can't give proper time of businesses and after some tiome you don't handel different problems.Also don't focused on our works . and this is the bigest disadvantage for you and your businesses, your income is always decrise and you lose ouy customer, however you can;t achove your tirget.

So it's mean to stop flying altogether in every year and foucse on our businesses ant take more time to our company.It will also effect the enviroment becaus when your not aviloble in ouy work area, many employs not working properly, don;t take her responsibality.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You state a position—“I agree” that the environmental benefits outweigh the disadvantages—and mention possible effects on individuals and businesses, including saving money and time and problems caused by being away from work. However, the response only minimally addresses the central comparison: it does not explain how reducing flights benefits the environment, and the business discussion focuses mainly on the disadvantages of frequent travel rather than weighing them against environmental gains. The claim that stopping flying helps a company is also not clearly connected to the question. The response is 50 words below the required minimum, which leaves little room to develop relevant reasons or examples. To improve, explain a specific environmental benefit, then compare it with a concrete cost to travellers or businesses and support your position.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening introduces the topic, a later paragraph gives your opinion and discusses business travel, and the final lines offer a concluding recommendation. Some links, such as “also” and “however,” show an effort to connect points. However, the ideas are not arranged coherently enough to make the argument easy to follow. The opening moves between affordability, time, and being unable to return to a company, while the later discussion repeats that frequent travel wastes time and harms business without clearly developing a sequence. Several sentences are fragments or loosely joined, and references such as “this development” and “it” are unclear. Use distinct paragraphs for environmental benefits, disadvantages, and your conclusion, with clear links between each point.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.0

Your vocabulary is basic and repetitive, but you make some relevant attempts to discuss the topic, including “environmental benefits,” “businesses,” “income,” and “customer.” These words show that you can identify the main subject areas. However, frequent spelling errors and inaccurate word choices strain the reader’s effort: examples include “enviromental,” “difecuelt,” “west of time,” and “tirget.” Some phrases are also unclear or unnatural, such as “businesses trife” and “give proper time of businesses.” This limited control makes it difficult to express precise comparisons between environmental gains and practical costs. Build a small set of accurate topic vocabulary and check spelling, word forms, and collocations; for example, use “business travel,” “waste time,” and “meet targets” in clear sentences.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple statements and longer sentences, and the response communicates a general opinion. However, the range of sentence structures is very limited, and frequent errors sometimes distort meaning. For example, “It good for those person” lacks a verb and has incorrect agreement, while “when you have own businesses and you fly many time” has problems with articles, plurals, and sentence construction. The final section also contains incomplete clauses, such as “and take more time to our company.” Verb forms and agreement are often inaccurate, as in “your income is always decrise” and “many employs not working properly.” Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, then check articles, plurals, and verb forms before adding longer clauses.

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