Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.

Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

It is irrefutable that, nowdays pollution reach at it highest abd because of that certain number of individuals decided to decrease the number of times they fly every year or they just quit flying.I believe that the advantages of this development will outweigh drwabacks, which I will explain in the following paragraphs.

First and foremost, flight wastes the highest fule compares to the all kind of other envantion of science and because of that reason it left the highest amout of carbon dioxide which is harmful for the natural world and when people reduce to use fly then automatically the usage of flight will decreased and as a result the less flights will fly and emission of carbon dioxide in the air will eventually decreased.So that, this one is the biggest benefit.

Moreover, many times it happens that more fule

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.5

You state a clear position: you believe the environmental benefits outweigh the drawbacks, and you begin to explain this through reduced fuel use and carbon emissions. However, the response addresses the task only partially. The environmental benefit is asserted rather than supported with a specific example, and the disadvantages for individuals and businesses are not explained; the final paragraph stops after “more fule”. The response is also 131 words, below the required minimum of 250, and nine words copied from the prompt were not counted. This leaves the argument substantially incomplete. To strengthen it, develop both sides of the comparison, explain why one outweighs the other, and support each main point with relevant examples before concluding.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic overall structure: an introduction gives your position, followed by a paragraph beginning “First and foremost” that develops one environmental reason. Linking expressions such as “Moreover” and “as a result” show an attempt to connect ideas. However, progression is limited because the response ends partway through the next point, and the comparison of benefits with disadvantages never takes shape. Some connections are also repetitive or awkward, particularly the repeated cause-and-effect sequence around reduced flights and emissions. Build a complete paragraph for each main idea, use clear topic sentences, and ensure each linking phrase expresses the relationship between ideas accurately. A concluding paragraph would help bring the argument together.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt topic-related vocabulary, including “pollution”, “carbon dioxide”, “emission” and “natural world”, and phrases such as “outweigh drawbacks” communicate the central position. However, spelling and word-choice problems are frequent and sometimes make the meaning difficult to follow: “nowdays”, “drwabacks”, “fule”, “envantion of science” and “amout” are examples. Some combinations are also unnatural, such as “reduce to use fly” and “the highest fuel compares to the all kind”. These issues limit precision and make the vocabulary less effective than the topic requires. Learn accurate collocations for aviation and environmental impacts, and check spelling and word forms carefully. For example, use “reduce the number of flights” and “carbon emissions” rather than the less natural phrases in the response.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including a cause-and-effect sentence beginning “when people reduce…” and a relative clause in “drawbacks, which I will explain”. The main position and the basic relationship between fewer flights and lower emissions can generally be understood. However, control is uneven in longer sentences: “pollution reach at it highest” has problems with agreement and sentence construction, while “the usage of flight will decreased” uses an incorrect verb form. Several clauses are joined without clear punctuation, making the long sentence about emissions difficult to follow. Practise accurate subject–verb agreement, verb forms after auxiliaries, and sentence boundaries. Breaking complex ideas into shorter, correctly punctuated sentences would improve clarity while retaining variety.

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