Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.

Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Some people have made a decision of reducing the number of times they fly every year or even not flying at all.Although that clearly have many advantages altogather which actually are greater in number then the disadvantages for businesses and individuals.

As scientists have researched on how much of these exhausting gases from planes are affecting our atmosphere due to the burning of the fuels,stopping it or making it less frequent can greatly reduce these effects and is really benefical for our enviournment while the needs for the meetings and dealings of businesses can be done online mostly in this internet era not all of that but most of that can be done this way.but for some individuals which are immigrant in other countries and fly back to back to their home country for religion related event and national event this is really depressing and that's one of the diadvantage of this.

Never the less not only this can help us enviournmentally it also have some other benefits for example it can also help to reduce the noise polloution produced due to these planes and also the deaths of birds and other maintainance related expences of these planes can be greatly reduce and because of this frequent flying the amount of tickets are really getting expensive day by day,so by reducing the number of time of flying or stopping will also have a positive effect on these prices which will help the busnissess and individuals in terms of affordibility.

In conclusion we can altogather agree on this that reducing the number of times people fly and in stopping it can help us positively in many thing like polloution,expences and in cleaning our enviournment which is actually one of the best benefit of this practice.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address both sides of the question and make your position clear: you believe the environmental benefits outweigh the disadvantages. Relevant points include reducing aircraft emissions and noise, while acknowledging that frequent travel can matter to immigrants and that businesses may need to meet. However, some ideas are asserted rather than explained. For example, the claim that fewer flights will lower ticket prices is not clearly supported, and the point about bird deaths and maintenance costs is only briefly mentioned. Develop the strongest arguments with a specific explanation or example, and clarify how the disadvantages compare with the environmental gains. The response meets the task’s length requirement; nine words copied from the prompt were not counted.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has an overall structure: an opening position, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Ideas generally progress from emissions and business travel to other possible benefits, and linking expressions such as “Although,” “Nevertheless,” and “In conclusion” help signal relationships. However, the first paragraph’s contrast is awkwardly joined, and the long body sentences combine several points, making the progression harder to follow. Some connections are also unclear—for instance, the move from reduced flying to lower ticket prices. Use clearer topic sentences, separate distinct arguments into shorter sentences, and make each paragraph’s central point explicit. This would make the organisation more consistently logical and cohesion less mechanical.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “atmosphere,” “burning of the fuels,” “noise pollution,” and “immigrant,” so the main ideas are understandable. However, spelling errors and imprecise or unnatural word combinations are noticeable and sometimes make the reader pause. Examples include “exhausting gases” for aircraft emissions, “religion related event,” and “maintenance related expences.” Several key words are also repeated, particularly “help,” “benefits,” and “reduce.” Aim for accurate spelling and more natural collocations, and vary repeated vocabulary where possible. More precise terms such as “greenhouse-gas emissions” and “international family visits” would help express your points clearly and appropriately.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentence forms, including a concession beginning “Although” and a reason clause introduced by “because.” The overall meaning is usually recoverable, but some grammatical errors and punctuation problems reduce clarity. For example, “Although that clearly have” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “it also have” should agree with the singular subject. The opening sentence fragment beginning “Although” is not properly connected to the main clause. Long sentences joined with commas or full stops used incorrectly also make sentence boundaries unclear. Practise building complete clauses, checking subject–verb agreement, and using full stops to separate distinct ideas; this will improve control while preserving your attempts at complex structures.

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