Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.

Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Many individuals have been flying multiple times in a year since late 19s, sometimes with family or friends and sometimes alone. Now, they decided to minimize the fly ratio, with or without people. From my prespective, it has positive and beneficial development that can overcome numerous issues, but in some contrast, it has some disadvantages as well.

firstly, I argue that if the ratio of fly will minimize, people will save the time and money. They will spend less money and put less effort that will help them to feel relax and satisfy. Furthermore, it can overcome the rate of pollutions such as air pollution that can produce by planes and environment pollution like when the public gathers, they throw garbage on the ports and streets that can effect the environment. Government should be taken action regarding this issue. In addition, it can promote variuos benefits to the company owners as they can give most of the time to their companies and employs to establish and grow their organisation. Instead of going abroad for attending meetings, they can arrange the schedule online.

Now, I am moving forward to some disadvantages. firstly, if I talk about regarding the businesses. It can delay the deligations and the company could be effected by the loss. The best solution is for obtaining goals for company is to take the flight when it is necessary.

To conclude, if individuals want to minimize the number of times they fly every year, it has positive sides and also some negative ones. It can help to save time and money, spread less pollution around the globe, establish the company in better ways. Some negatives are also included such as sometimes it can delay the progress in profit in some companies.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You give a position that reducing flights has benefits, while acknowledging disadvantages, and you include relevant points about saving money, reducing pollution, and arranging meetings online. However, the comparison required by the question is only partly developed: the environmental benefits are mentioned, but the claim about pollution from rubbish at ports and streets is not clearly linked to fewer flights, and the disadvantages for individuals receive little attention. The business disadvantage—delayed delegations and possible losses—is also brief and lacks an example or explanation. The conclusion repeats the main points rather than weighing them clearly. To strengthen the response, explain why the environmental gains outweigh (or do not outweigh) the practical costs, and support both sides with specific reasoning.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has an introduction, a paragraph presenting benefits, a paragraph on disadvantages, and a conclusion, so the reader can identify its broad structure. You also use signposts such as “Furthermore,” “In addition,” and “To conclude.” However, progression within paragraphs is sometimes unclear: the discussion moves from air pollution to rubbish at ports, then to government action and company owners without showing how these points connect. “Now, I am moving forward to some disadvantages” is an overly mechanical transition, and “firstly” is repeated. Some references, such as “it” in the conclusion, are not precise. Group related ideas more carefully and use transitions that show the relationship between environmental effects and business or personal costs.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You attempt vocabulary relevant to the topic, including “air pollution,” “environment,” “schedule online,” and “establish and grow their organisation.” This gives you enough language to communicate the main ideas, but the range is limited and several word choices or collocations make meaning less clear. For example, “minimize the fly ratio” is not a natural way to describe reducing flight frequency, while “pollutions” and “deligations” are inaccurate forms or spellings. Phrases such as “feel relax and satisfy” and “delay the progress in profit” are also awkward. Build a more precise set of topic expressions, and check spelling and word forms. More natural alternatives are included in the suggestions below.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use some longer sentences and attempt subordinate clauses, for example, “if the ratio of fly will minimize, people will save the time and money.” However, these complex attempts are often faulty, and errors occur frequently enough to make parts of the response difficult to follow. Examples include “if the ratio … will minimize” instead of a correctly formed conditional, “Government should be taken action,” and “the company could be effected by the loss.” There are also problems with articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries, including the lowercase “firstly” after a full stop. Practise accurate conditional forms and basic clause construction first, then check each sentence for a clear subject and correctly formed verb. This will make your ideas easier to understand.

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