Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.

Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

During development and business, everyperson focuses on the developing area regardless other factors. Everything can be built but the environment human and other animals life can't be develpoped. Personally I believe business and personal development can never outweigh the environment benefits.

To fly over one place to another, the vehicle and airport require immense amount of place. It's very common that, flying places are built far away from residential area. To built that, huge amount of deforestation occurs which has big toll in environment. This causes extreme heat in nature and turns into global warming. Another point is animals and their living places are ruined. This turn into risking wild life.

For this, businessmen are flying less unless it's very important.If it requires, they are roaming together. This helps in two ways: they can save the amount and less fuel is consumed which refer to less pollution. In this modern era, every meeting can be done via online. It doesn't require in person presence all the time. On the otherhand, this airline business has huge business opportunity, but the permanrnt damage of environemnt can't be restored. Government is taking necessary steps to decrease the loss and balance the environmental safety with other developing area.

World will develop in its pace. People will adapt on it and individual and business develpment will take place by it's own. But it won't be a worthu decission to risk the entire nature. So, environmental benefit is import

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

Your position is clear: you believe environmental benefits outweigh the costs, stated directly in the opening and reinforced by the conclusion. You give relevant reasons, including habitat loss and pollution, and acknowledge a disadvantage by noting the airline industry’s business opportunities. However, the response addresses the comparison only partially. The effects on individuals are barely discussed, and the business disadvantage is mentioned but not weighed in detail against the environmental gains. Some claims, such as airport construction causing deforestation and extreme heat, need clearer explanation or support. The response also falls seven words short of the required minimum. Develop both sides more fully and add a specific example to support your reasoning.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, two body paragraphs and a conclusion. The ideas about airport construction and reduced business travel are grouped into relevant paragraphs, and phrases such as “Another point” and “For this” attempt to guide the reader. However, progression is not always clear: the discussion shifts from airport land use to businessmen travelling less, then to online meetings and government action without fully connecting these points. Some linking is mechanical or inaccurate, as in “This turn into risking wild life,” while “On the otherhand” introduces a contrast that is not developed. The final sentence is also incomplete, which weakens the ending. Use clearer topic sentences and explain how each point supports your overall comparison.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some topic-relevant vocabulary, including “deforestation,” “global warming,” “pollution,” and “environmental safety,” which helps communicate the main subject. There are also attempts at less common expressions, such as “immense amount” and “permanent damage.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or unclear, including “flying places,” “huge toll in environment,” and “roaming together.” Spelling errors such as “develpoped,” “permanrnt,” and “environemnt” are noticeable and can distract the reader. Aim for precise, natural combinations—for example, “airport infrastructure,” “a heavy environmental toll,” and “travel together”—and proofread carefully for spelling and word forms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, including “Everything can be built but the environment…” and “If it requires, businessmen are roaming together.” However, control is inconsistent, and errors sometimes make relationships between ideas difficult to follow. Examples include “To built that,” “This turn into risking wild life,” and “It doesn't require in person presence all the time,” where verb forms, sentence construction or missing grammatical elements affect clarity. Articles and agreement also need attention, as in “require immense amount of place” and “the environment human and other animals life.” The final phrase, “So, environmental benefit is import,” is incomplete. Practise building accurate sentences with subordinate clauses, and check verb forms, articles and sentence endings during revision.

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