Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.

Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In recent years, an increasing number of people have choosen to reduce their air travel altogether.Although this decision may create certain difficulties for individuals and businesses.

The main advantage is positive impact on enviroment. Aircrats produces significant amount of carbon dioxide, which affects the Air condition and climate change.If fewer people travels by air then the use of aircrafts will be less and their will be less enviromental damege.Furthermore reduce air travell will reduce noise pollution around airports.

On the other hand reducing number of flights may cause difficulties for individuals and businesses.People who frequently travel internationally for education and businesses may find alternative methods of transport more expensive or time consuming.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the environmental benefit of reduced flying and mention disadvantages for people travelling for education or business, so the response is relevant to the question. However, the task asks you to decide whether the benefits outweigh the disadvantages, and your position is not clearly stated or supported. The opening says the decision may create difficulties, while the body mainly lists effects without comparing their importance. The environmental points—carbon emissions and airport noise—are relevant but are not explained with examples or developed consequences; the disadvantages are even less developed. The response also falls substantially short of the required minimum length, leaving the task only minimally addressed. State your view directly, then develop both sides and explain why one outweighs the other.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an introduction is followed by an environmental-benefits paragraph and a paragraph beginning “On the other hand” for disadvantages. This gives the reader a simple sense of contrast. However, the response ends before the argument reaches a conclusion, and ideas within the paragraphs are mostly listed rather than developed in a clear progression. Linking is limited, with “Furthermore” and “On the other hand” doing most of the work; some connections between cause and effect are difficult to follow. For example, the sentence about fewer people travelling and reduced environmental damage needs clearer phrasing and a more explicit link to the main argument. Use a complete paragraph structure, including a conclusion, and connect each supporting point to your stated position.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

Your vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the basic topic, with relevant terms such as “carbon dioxide,” “climate change,” “noise pollution,” and “alternative methods of transport.” However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make the writing less clear, including “choosen,” “enviroment,” “Aircrats,” “travell,” and “damege.” Some phrases are also imprecise or unnatural, such as “positive impact on enviroment” and “Air condition” when discussing climate effects. These errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the general ideas, but they reduce precision and can cause difficulty. Check spelling carefully and build a wider set of accurate expressions for emissions, travel alternatives, and effects on businesses.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple sentences and a more complex conditional structure, as in “If fewer people travels by air then the use of aircrafts will be less.” However, the range remains limited, and errors occur frequently enough to affect fluency. The opening fragment, “Although this decision may create certain difficulties for individuals and businesses,” is not a complete sentence. There are also agreement and article problems, such as “Aircrats produces” and “significant amount,” and the conditional clause should use “travel” rather than “travels.” Missing spaces after full stops and inconsistent capitalisation also affect punctuation. Practise writing complete sentences and checking subject–verb agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries; then add a few accurately controlled complex structures.

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