Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-13

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.

Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

In recent years, some people have decided to reduce the number times they fly in a year or they will stop travelling through flights. However, i don't think that the benefits will outweigh the disadvantages for individuals or businesses.

To begin with listing the advatages of less flights is that there will be a reduction in carbon emission into the air.Also due to less air traffic, the air will remain clean and thus results in less global warming.

However, the reduction in air flight can cause someone or a business to face a tremendous amount of loss. Since many buisness have been spread through out the world and air travel has turned out to be great means of exporting or importing the goods. Which saves lots of time and money when exporting or importing any goods with other mode of transportation.

Also, most of the reason behind the global warming and air pollution is combustion vehicals or vehicals who uses fuel to run. In the recent years this has been recorded that there's been a increase in number of vehicals runing on the roads and the amount is increasing day by day. Also, some countries may face a deadlock without the means of air travels since travelling by road can be impossible if a country is an island or

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You state a clear overall view in the opening: you do not think the environmental benefits outweigh the disadvantages. You also identify relevant points, including reduced carbon emissions and possible losses for businesses that depend on air transport. However, the response addresses the question only partially: the disadvantages for individuals receive little attention, and the business argument is not fully explained or supported with a specific example. The final point about islands is left unfinished, so the discussion does not reach a complete conclusion. The response is 211 words, which is 39 words below the 250-word minimum; eight words copied from the prompt were not counted. Develop both sides of the comparison and finish with a conclusion that directly answers the question.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a basic overall structure: an introduction, a paragraph presenting environmental benefits, and a paragraph discussing disadvantages. Linking expressions such as “To begin with,” “However,” and “Also” help signal the direction of ideas. However, progression is limited, and the final paragraph combines several points—business transport, other vehicles, and island travel—without clearly showing how they connect to the main comparison. Some links are awkward or incomplete: “Which saves lots of time and money” is a sentence fragment, while the final sentence ends at “or,” leaving the idea unfinished. Use separate paragraphs for distinct arguments, connect each example explicitly to your position, and provide a complete concluding paragraph.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “carbon emission,” “air traffic,” “global warming,” “exporting or importing,” and “air pollution,” so the reader can follow the main subject. There is also an attempt to express consequences with phrases such as “a tremendous amount of loss.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate or repetitive, including “travelling through flights,” “air flight,” and “great means.” Spelling errors such as “advatages,” “buisness,” “vehicals,” and “runing” also reduce accuracy. Aim for more precise, natural expressions and check spelling carefully; for example, describe people as “travelling by air” and businesses as “relying on air freight.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt some longer sentence forms, including a reason clause beginning “Since many business…” and a contrast introduced by “However.” Nevertheless, the range is limited, and attempts to combine ideas often produce faulty or incomplete sentences. “Since many business have been spread through out the world and air travel has turned out to be great means…” is not a complete sentence, and “Which saves lots of time and money” is a fragment. There are also recurring errors in articles, agreement, and sentence construction, as in “the number times,” “a increase,” and “vehicles who uses fuel.” Practise building complete sentences with clear subjects and verbs, and check agreement and articles before combining clauses.

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