Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.

Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, some people are choosing to travel by plane less frequently or avoid air travel completely. I believe that, the environmental benefits of this decision outweigh its disadvantages for individuals and businesses. However, every year people are flying by plane four to five times in a year and plane is making a huge air pollution and this is harmful for all environment. On the other hand, some people are deciding to avoid travel with plane because it is making approximately air pollution that is not good for the environments. Some people have thinking we have to travel only two times in a year and this is the best decision for safe and clean environment. From my prospective, if people are thinking that we are not travel by plane than its is totally disadvantages for the individuals and businesses because their business is not working and they are face a lot of problem in their business. Therefore, bad impact for all businesses for them for example, if people have stop travel by plane some people have get a problem, business meetings and international trade affect and tourism industry get financial loss etc. Furthermore, this is the important and benefits for living environment and they all are make a good money and very neat and clean environment awarness. For example, air pollution will decrease, people will earn more money, and international tourism will increase etc. Last but not least, if people have trouble of air pollution than stop travelling four or five time by plane it is maintain for air pollution and become safe environmental warness. It is not totally avoid travel by plane it's avoid four or five times.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You state a position in the opening—that the environmental benefits outweigh the disadvantages—and you mention relevant effects on businesses, including meetings, trade and tourism. However, the response only partially develops the comparison requested. The disadvantages are described as businesses facing problems, but the environmental benefits are not clearly explained or weighed against them. Some claims are also contradictory: you say reducing flights will help the environment, then suggest people will earn more money and international tourism will increase. To strengthen the response, explain how fewer flights reduce emissions, then compare this benefit with specific costs to individuals and businesses, supporting each point with a clear example.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is an attempt to organise the response using phrases such as “On the other hand,” “Furthermore,” and “Last but not least,” and the opening gives the reader your general position. However, ideas do not progress in a clear sequence: environmental benefits, business disadvantages and unrelated claims about earnings and tourism are mixed together. Several points repeat the idea of avoiding flights without adding explanation, and references such as “they” and “this” are not always clear. Use separate paragraphs for your position, the environmental benefits, and the disadvantages, followed by a conclusion. Make each paragraph develop one main idea and use linking expressions only when they accurately show the relationship between points.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant topic vocabulary, including “air pollution,” “international trade,” “business meetings” and “tourism industry,” so the reader can identify the subject of your argument. However, the range is limited and several phrases are repeated or used inaccurately, which sometimes makes the meaning difficult to follow. For example, “environmental awareness” does not express the same idea as a clean environment, and “making a huge air pollution” is an unnatural collocation. Aim for more precise terms for the effects of aviation and the costs of reduced travel, and check that each phrase conveys the intended meaning. Greater variety and more accurate collocations would make your argument clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including a conditional idea beginning “if people are thinking,” and you use some linking clauses. However, complex structures are often faulty, and frequent errors in verb forms, agreement, articles and sentence construction can make the reader work to understand your meaning. Examples include “some people have thinking,” “their business is not working,” and “they are face a lot of problem.” The sentence beginning “However, every year people are flying…” also joins ideas awkwardly. Practise forming clear subject–verb sentences and accurate conditionals, such as “If fewer people fly, emissions will fall.” Then check verb forms and punctuation when combining clauses.

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