Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.

Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Nowadays, many people have decided to reduce the number of times they take the flight yearly or to stop taking flights altogether. Although it helps to reduce the air space traffic congestion and fuel consumption, it makes people to travel with other modes of transportation which not only more time taking but stressful. I strongly believe it didn't outweigh disadvantages for individuals, as travel by air is more convenient and more comfortable as compare to other modes and it also saved alot of time.

First and foremost, it helps people to have a save and comfortable journey, as you can travel to far destinations with more easy, For instance, I have to go to karachi to attend seminar, So i choose to take flight which i find more comfortable and easy as compared to train or by my own vehicle. I also find it more faster and time saving. As a result, I reached venue on time and felt more freshed.

Secondly, it also helps to save time when you want to reach at your destination urgently. Mostly businesss man used to travel alot by air to save time and to utilize their time on other thing parrallelly. For example, my ceo had taken alot of flights and prefer travel by aeroplane because it is more faster and without delay route. Consequently, he always reached in his meetings on time.

On the other hand, reducing number of flight has numerous environmental benifits, if people don't take flight than there is no need for more aeroplanes and it also reduce fuel consumption. While it has environmental benifits, it is quite limited.

To sum up, flights are more comfortable and faster mode of transportations.

I strongly believe, It didn't outweigh disadvantages for individuals and businesses, As its disadvantages are more.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You give a clear overall view that the disadvantages of reducing flights outweigh the environmental benefits, and you support the personal-convenience side with examples about travelling to Karachi and attending business meetings. However, the response addresses the question only partially: the environmental benefits are mentioned briefly—less air traffic and fuel consumption—but are not explained or weighed against the disadvantages in a developed way. The business impact is also asserted rather than explored; the CEO example shows why one person flies, but not what reduced flights would mean for businesses. The conclusion repeats your position without resolving this comparison. Develop both sides with specific consequences and explain why one outweighs the other. The response meets the required length; 10 words copied from the task prompt were excluded from the count.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, two paragraphs supporting air travel, a paragraph acknowledging environmental benefits, and a conclusion. Basic signposting such as “First and foremost,” “Secondly,” and “On the other hand” helps readers follow the broad direction. However, progression is limited because the first two body paragraphs make very similar points about comfort and saving time, while the environmental paragraph is brief and not connected to a clear comparison. Some links are awkward or unclear, including “Although it helps …, it makes people to travel” and “While it has environmental benefits, it is quite limited.” Build each paragraph around a distinct point, use transitions to show how evidence supports your position, and make references such as “it” unambiguous.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use enough topic-related vocabulary to communicate the main ideas, including “fuel consumption,” “environmental benefits,” “destinations,” and “meetings.” However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning less natural: “take the flight yearly,” “more time taking,” “without delay route,” and “more faster.” Spelling and word-form errors are also noticeable, for example “benifits,” “parrallelly,” and “businesss man.” These issues fit a response where vocabulary is minimally adequate but errors are conspicuous. Learn common transport and business collocations, check spelling carefully, and avoid repeating “comfortable,” “easy,” and “faster” by using more precise alternatives.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and complex sentences, including a concession in “Although it helps…” and a reason clause beginning “because.” The main message is generally understandable, but the range is limited and complex sentences are often faulty. Examples include “it makes people to travel,” “which not only more time taking but stressful,” and “I strongly believe it didn't outweigh disadvantages,” where verb patterns, missing verbs or articles, and tense choices affect accuracy. There are also errors in agreement and sentence boundaries, such as “it also reduce fuel consumption” and the comma splice in “I strongly believe, It didn't outweigh…”. Practise reliable sentence patterns, especially verb complements, articles, agreement, and punctuation, then proofread each sentence for a complete subject and verb.

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