Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-07-27
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.
Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Today we talk about the advantages and this advantages of enviroment . Some people decided to reduced the number of time when they fly every years or they do not flying together. I belive that the benifits are greatwers then the disadvantages althought there are some nagative effect om individuals and business.
On the one hand reducing air is the best for envirorment because airoplane porduced the largest number of carbion dioxside . Which cause air pollutions and globel warming if few people travel by plane pollution will decreas and enviorment become fresh and for example manny people now use online meeting instret of business flight which help reduce emission .
On the second hand fly less can create many problem for individuals and business some company depend on air travels to meet clients and deliver services . In addiction airplane company hotels and travels aggency may loses costomer .Which can reduces there income people who far for there family may also find diffiulties to visit them .
In the conculation altough reducing air travels has some disadvantages of business and individuals i thinks the enviroments benifits is more important. I belives that advantages is outweight the disandvantages .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses the prompt by discussing both the environmental benefits and the disadvantages for individuals and businesses. However, the essay is significantly under the 250-word minimum requirement, which limits the depth of the arguments. While a clear position is established in the introduction and conclusion, the supporting ideas are underdeveloped. For instance, the mention of online meetings as an alternative to business travel is a good start, but it lacks sufficient elaboration to fully support the argument. To improve, you must expand on your points with more detailed explanations and specific examples to meet the length requirement and provide a more comprehensive response.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate, such as 'On the second hand' instead of 'On the other hand'. The progression of ideas is sometimes hindered by the limited development of sentences. Referencing is occasionally unclear, and the flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words to connect ideas more naturally. The paragraphing is present but the internal structure of the paragraphs needs more logical flow to reach a higher band.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors such as 'enviroment', 'airoplane', 'porduced', 'carbion', 'dioxside', and 'conculation'. These errors occasionally make the text difficult to read. The range of vocabulary is basic and lacks the precision required for a higher band score. To improve, you should focus on learning the correct spelling of common academic terms and attempt to use more varied vocabulary related to the environment and business sectors. Expanding your range of collocations will also help you express your ideas more clearly and effectively.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('airplane porduced', 'pollution will decreas'), incorrect verb forms ('do not flying'), and punctuation errors. There is a limited range of sentence structures, and the attempts at complex sentences are often faulty, which can impede communication. While the meaning is generally understandable, the persistent errors in basic grammar and sentence construction significantly affect the quality of the writing. Focusing on basic sentence structure, verb tenses, and proofreading for common errors will be essential for improvement.
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