Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 20 · 2026-07-31

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people have decided to reduce the number of times they fly every year or to stop flying altogether.

Do you think the environmental benefits of this development outweigh the disadvantages for individuals and businesses?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Indeed, environment play essential role in our lives. Travelling by plane is make people life more easier then past days. there are some who think reducing travel by plane is good approach whereas. i strongly believe that while reducing plane has several benefits to environment but resulting negative impact on people businesses and their lives. i would like to share my views in upcoming paragraphs.

to begin, there are plethora of reasons why it is significant for people businesses. the predominant one reason is. Travelling by plane is very important for those who run business across the countries. it play vital role in their business without travelling by plane its hard for them to run their business because they have their meetings, they have to meet different people for their businesses on daily basis. There are lots of big multinational companies who running their business across the countries if they do not have plane how they manage their everything. lots of companies needs face to face meetings to sign their major deals, conduct factory inspections, manage global teams effectively. Apart from this, it will also have adverse impact on tourism and hospitality industries because of if people are able to travel it will automatically loss people jobs who are working in resorts, hotels, restaurants, bars etc. lots of people like to travelling from one place to another for grab knowledge learning culture values and morals. these are main reasons why traveling by plane is important for people.

furthermore, there are few more reasons why plane is major transport for all regular people. The first foremost reasons is, many people live in different countries or provinces from their parents, children and spouse without air travel it is impossible to meet them or if they choose travelling by other transport it takes lots of time by sea or land. However, air travel is only option is emergency situation if any family member will be falls ill, plane is only and easier option for those people. Whereas, for travelling in abroad there is not other easier option available to travel. travelling by ship takes month and lots of week to reach their destination its take more longer time then expected.

In conclusion, every thing always have pros and cons but i strongly believe that reducing plane will create people life much more harder of living abroad whereas, environment benefits are also cannot be denied.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses the prompt by discussing both the environmental benefits and the disadvantages for businesses and individuals. However, the development of ideas is somewhat repetitive, particularly regarding the importance of business travel. The position is clear, but the argument lacks depth and nuance. For example, the discussion on environmental benefits is mentioned in the introduction and conclusion but is not explored in the body paragraphs, which focus almost exclusively on the disadvantages. To reach a higher band, you should provide a more balanced analysis by dedicating a full paragraph to the environmental impact, rather than just acknowledging it in passing.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical progression is often hindered by awkward phrasing and repetitive sentence structures. While some cohesive devices are used (e.g., 'to begin', 'furthermore', 'in conclusion'), they are sometimes applied mechanically. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'if they do not have plane how they manage their everything', where the connection to the previous point is weak. Paragraphing is present, but the internal flow within paragraphs needs improvement to ensure that ideas transition more smoothly and logically.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety required for a higher band. There is frequent repetition of basic words like 'people', 'business', and 'travelling'. Some word choices are unnatural or incorrect, such as 'make people life more easier' instead of 'make people's lives easier' and 'for grab knowledge' instead of 'to acquire knowledge'. To improve, you should focus on using more sophisticated collocations and synonyms to avoid repetition and demonstrate a wider range of vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The essay contains a high frequency of grammatical errors, including subject-verb agreement issues ('environment play', 'it play vital role'), missing articles, and incorrect sentence structures ('if any family member will be falls ill'). While the meaning is generally understandable, these errors are persistent and occur throughout the text. The range of structures is limited, relying mostly on simple sentences. To achieve a higher score, you need to work on basic grammatical accuracy, particularly verb tenses and pluralization, and attempt to incorporate more complex sentence structures with greater control.

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